The following appeared in an editorial in a business magazine.
"Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people ten to twenty-five years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
According to recent survey made by Whirlwind it is predicated that sales of their games will increase which is breaking down from past two years. According to survey made by Whirlwind it is clear that people like to play more realistic game which have lifelike graphics. Assuming that, all people have high end gadgets to run such high end games. However, before predicating feature sales, few questions must be answer.
First of all, How vast was the survey? How many people have taken survey? Maybe survey which was made was not to vast or only professional gamer was only involved in survey. Maybe survey was conducted in small area. If either of this scenario is true than less number of people has taken the survey and that to all were professional gamer who have high end devices to support high end games. Everyone is not professional gamer everyone would not have high end device to play such a heavy games this point was not consider. Keeping in mind that most of its customers are normal people who play games for refreshment would not able to play this game, assuming they don’t have high end device.
Secondly, What if another company launch a game which does not required high end device and have good lifelike graphics? If this comes out to be true than predication made by survey, that sales of Whirlwind video games will increase dramatically in the next few months will fail. Maybe there will be no change in the sales or maybe sales will decrease more. No one can predict feature.
In conclusion, Considering all above question, it is very difficult to predict that weather the sales of Whirlwind video games will increase or decrease. If company make survey considering not only professional gamer but also common consumer who don’t have high end device than companies sale can be predicted to some extend.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1480 1500
No. of Different Words: 149 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.669 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.331 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 59 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.924 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h end games. However, before predicating feature sales, few questions must be ans...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ed in survey. Maybe survey was conducted in small area. If either of this scenari...
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Line 3, column 516, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...y such a heavy games this point was not consider. Keeping in mind that most of its custo...
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Suggestion:
...redication made by survey, that sales of Whirlwind video games will increase dram...
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Line 7, column 319, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
...companies sale can be predicted to some extend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84444444444 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38540535972 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488888888889 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.7609909349 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7647058824 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5294117647 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268476899189 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0988448372469 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641361465385 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187637545395 0.128457276422 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025259867147 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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