The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author presents the case of Seaville's town to enunciates that by reducing the number of rentals of mopeds ,Balmer can prevent the accidents. However, in order to reach a concrete conclusion, there are several questions that needs to answered. One must consider the causes of accidents in both places, the careful analysis of the reason that brought down accident rates in Seaville and several other things.
To commence with, author states that there a reduction of 50% was seen in Seaville by limiting the moped rentals. However, 5o% being a very high fall vividly points out and speaks of more evidence. A single factor alone can be a reason for reduction, is very unlikely. It is very much possible that maybe last year climate conditions were good or authorities there improved the road conditions and more street lights were put in the street for late night journeys or the government their made their traffic rules more strict last year that made people more cautious while driving because of the fear of heavy fine or strict punishments. In fact, there can be many more reasons that will be conducive to accident reduction. Without answering and critically examining other factors, it wouldn't be cogent to say that a mere restriction on rental has led to decline in accidents in Seaville and will bring the same propitious results in Balmer as well.
Also, the question, whether the accidents at Seaville mainly consist of rented or privately owned moped, also needs to answered. If, the accidents in Seaville consisted of mostly rented mopeds then imposing the limits on moped rental seems convincing. However, what if, the percentage of people owning mopeds in Balmer is much high ? In that case even if the authorities there put the limit on moped rentals then also the rule will not give any fruitful results. Hence, it's quite imperative to understand the reasons for accidents in Seaville and Balmer first, the number of privately owned mopeds and then only it would be prudent to go about to decide a solution for preventing accidents.
Furthermore, the author should enumerate the list of vehicles owned by the people living Balmer. The reason it is necessary because it is possible that once, a limit is put on number of per day rentals of mopeds, people will be forced to bring their own vehicles like car or they can even go walking to different places. In both the cases, precluding the possibility of accident is very difficult. If pedestrians are increased then, number of mopeds and pedestrians accidents may increase due to more crowded streets. Also, if people start taking out their cars then also, accidents are very likely to happen.
To sum up, there are numerous questions as discussed above, that must be answered in order to reach a definite point to establish a rule for preventing accidents. The points presented by author are rife with flaws and apparently argument need more evidence for its support.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...reducing the number of rentals of mopeds ,Balmer can prevent the accidents. Howeve...
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... critically examining other factors, it wouldnt be cogent to say that a mere restrictio...
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...n Balmer as well. Also, the question, whether the accidents at Seaville mainly...
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...ly owned moped, also needs to answered. If, the accidents in Seaville consisted of...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'apparently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'in fact', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238970588235 0.25644967241 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.161764705882 0.15541462614 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0882352941176 0.0836205057962 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0753676470588 0.0520304965353 145% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0220588235294 0.0272364105082 81% => OK
Prepositions: 0.132352941176 0.125424944231 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0588235294118 0.0416121511921 141% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56276489075 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0330882352941 0.026700313972 124% => OK
Particles: 0.00735294117647 0.001811407834 406% => OK
Determiners: 0.0827205882353 0.113004496875 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0238970588235 0.0255425247493 94% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00735294117647 0.0127820249294 58% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2952.0 2731.13054187 108% => OK
No of words: 496.0 446.07635468 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.95161290323 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.375 0.378187486979 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.262096774194 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.197580645161 0.208842608468 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116935483871 0.135150697306 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56276489075 2.79052419416 92% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 207.018472906 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489919354839 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 57.0355273218 52.1807786196 109% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.039408867 105% => OK
Sentence length: 23.619047619 23.2022227129 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.4413078657 57.7814097925 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.571428571 141.986410481 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.619047619 23.2022227129 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 49.8287250384 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.65957446809 1.8405768891 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.494645087145 0.441005458295 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.102304021293 0.135418324435 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0506304322918 0.0829849096947 61% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514041058112 0.58762219726 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143675901379 0.147661913831 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205122492608 0.193483328276 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125610070279 0.0970749176394 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.373759596996 0.42659136922 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.118658471214 0.0774707102158 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.35809389092 0.312017818177 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.124736230315 0.0698173142475 179% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.87684729064 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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