The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author has put forward an argument regarding the increasing number of accidents on Balmer Island. As the population of the island increases during summer season, there is a possibility of increasing accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, moped being the popular form of transportation. Therefore, the number of moped rentals must be qualified during this season. However, the argument is flawed in the way that author fails to substantiate it with strong evidences and is teemed with poor reasoning. Hence, it is not essential that the recommendation will have the predicted result.
First of all, the major assumption made in the argument is that the number of moped accidents are directly related to the number of mopeds on the island. In fact, the number of mopeds are being considered as the only underlying reason for the accidents. This idea is somehow plausible, but there are various factors that may lead to road accidents.
One of those unstated factors are ineffectual traffic rules. There is no consideration of the rigidity of the traffic rules in the area, in terms of speed. Over-speeding is always perilous when there is surfeit of traffic on the road. Whether government has taken any initiative to ensure the road safety measures have not been declared. Another factor is that there are various people who are inept in driving skills and are still handed over the license to drive. Therefore, they are oblivious of the basic driving rules and etiquettes. If there are robust underlying criteria for verifying driving skills or not, has been left unanswered.
Furthermore, the road conditions plays a pivotal role in controlling the traffic, substandard roads often resulting in accidents. Also, if there are separate lanes on the road, for two wheelers and pedestrians, then it is highly unlikely that the accidents may still happen. There is no reflection on the road condition on the island in the stated argument.
Another major flaw in the argument is the author’s reliability on the results that have been achieved on the neighboring island of Seaville. If the argument had provided evidence that the two islands are correlated, in terms of the factors that have been mentioned above, and illustrating the same, then the argument would have been stronger. This assumption is unsubstantiated as there is no comparison between the type of population on the two islands, traffic rules, road conditions, etc. There can be some other initiatives that Seaville’s town council might have taken to control the accidents apart from the reduction in the moped rentals.
Hence, the careful perusing of the evidence provided in the argument reveals that many questions have been left unanswered and without the convincing answers to the same, the reader cannot consider it to be substantive. To buttress the argument, the author must consider all the factors that undergirds the claim of reduction in road accidents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 235, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...here is surfeit of traffic on the road. Whether government has taken any initiative to ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'apart from', 'in fact', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.250936329588 0.25644967241 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.176029962547 0.15541462614 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0692883895131 0.0836205057962 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0393258426966 0.0520304965353 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00936329588015 0.0272364105082 34% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12734082397 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0730337078652 0.0416121511921 176% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88958655735 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0168539325843 0.026700313972 63% => OK
Particles: 0.00187265917603 0.001811407834 103% => OK
Determiners: 0.131086142322 0.113004496875 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0168539325843 0.0255425247493 66% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0112359550562 0.0127820249294 88% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2954.0 2731.13054187 108% => OK
No of words: 476.0 446.07635468 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.20588235294 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.386554621849 0.378187486979 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.298319327731 0.287650121315 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.216386554622 0.208842608468 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.155462184874 0.135150697306 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88958655735 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 207.018472906 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.469332199767 100% => OK
Word variations: 53.4530167073 52.1807786196 102% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8333333333 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6832467012 57.7814097925 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.083333333 141.986410481 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 49.6652661064 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.00833333333 1.8405768891 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.600242592919 0.441005458295 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.160378773416 0.135418324435 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.104786536137 0.0829849096947 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.598604556582 0.58762219726 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166278500562 0.147661913831 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.272370994138 0.193483328276 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150503158564 0.0970749176394 155% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.540212632128 0.42659136922 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0895563213569 0.0774707102158 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.452051002046 0.312017818177 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945658162881 0.0698173142475 135% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.87684729064 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 12.0 5.36822660099 224% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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