The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument is proposing that if skateboarding is prohibited, the business in central plaza will return to its previously high level. However the author failed to render the evidence of this argument, neither the direct relation between increasing skateboarding and decreasing shoppers is made clear. Also, the reason of increased litter and vandalism in plaza is obscured.
There may be different reasons for the decrease in number of shoppers in Central Plaza. It is possible that, some of the shop owners may not be able to meet the competitive demands of the market, which is leading to the decreased shoppers. Inflation can also be a reason for this trend. There is a fair chance that some shop owners might be facing financial challenges and thus not be able to run their business. The other possibility is the buying capacity of the people residing around the central plaza might not be good, which would affect the business there. The author should consider all these possibilities before coming to any conclusion.
Furthermore, the author failed to produce plausible evidence regarding the other statements made. It is indeed evident in the argument that the amount of litter and vandalism is increased throughout the plaza, but the reasons are still abstruse. The author needs to perform a more elaborate study regarding the subject as there may be various reasons. For example, it could be because of the lack of police station or because of the presence of some anti social elements. Likewise, there may be many reasons for the increase in skateboarding. The author needs to perform an investigation and find out if these two activities are actually related. It will not be prudent to come to a conclusion by just making some assumptions.
The argument lacks strength because of the following basic reasons. Firstly, it is because the argument is based on two facts which failed to be proved related. The decline of business and the increase in skateboarding do not seem to be linked. Similarly, the increase in vandalism and in skateboarding activity also does not seem to be related. Secondly, the argument is relying on assumptions only. Without proper evidence, it would not be wise to accuse skateboarding for the plight of central plaza’s shop owners.
In conclusion, it can only be said that the author’s argument is very weak and it needs a lot of investigation and proper statistical and analytical study. No recommendations can be made at this stage and the author needs to provide evidence regarding the relations which are made in this argument. Only with proper analysis and its conclusive reports rendering the relationship between skateboarding and the increased crime in plaza, he can pursue his readers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ll return to its previously high level. However the author failed to render the evidenc...
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Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... in Central Plaza. It is possible that, some of the shop owners may not be able to meet the...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'likewise', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'for example', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214428857715 0.25644967241 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.188376753507 0.15541462614 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0701402805611 0.0836205057962 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0561122244489 0.0520304965353 108% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0260521042084 0.0272364105082 96% => OK
Prepositions: 0.110220440882 0.125424944231 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0681362725451 0.0416121511921 164% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91602638475 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0320641282565 0.026700313972 120% => OK
Particles: 0.00200400801603 0.001811407834 111% => OK
Determiners: 0.120240480962 0.113004496875 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0320641282565 0.0255425247493 126% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00801603206413 0.0127820249294 63% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2755.0 2731.13054187 101% => OK
No of words: 450.0 446.07635468 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.12222222222 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.4 0.378187486979 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293333333333 0.287650121315 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.22 0.208842608468 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.14 0.135150697306 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91602638475 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 207.018472906 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473333333333 0.469332199767 101% => OK
Word variations: 52.8957447513 52.1807786196 101% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1712609953 57.7814097925 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.2 141.986410481 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.76 0.724660767414 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 47.3333333333 51.9672348444 91% => OK
Elegance: 1.45185185185 1.8405768891 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.457423195112 0.441005458295 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104647387862 0.135418324435 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0945616129121 0.0829849096947 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.533280343152 0.58762219726 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142664466071 0.147661913831 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199197667975 0.193483328276 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105057132794 0.0970749176394 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.522427096854 0.42659136922 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.082623061711 0.0774707102158 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.347979230239 0.312017818177 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704172008856 0.0698173142475 101% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.87684729064 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 12.0 5.36822660099 224% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 25.0 14.657635468 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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The argument 3 is duplicated to argument 1 and 2. Need to argue:
Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels
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Rates: 60.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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