The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper.
"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of this proposal to discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine offers an interesting argument but to move forward on the proposal would specifically require more information and cogitation. Apparently, it is not representative and reliable, and thus, not strong enough to stop participation of organized athletic competition for children under nine. My arguments for these points are as follows.
Firstly, the author claimed that over 40.000 children in youth-league sports under age nine suffered from injuries. Through there have been injuries, we do not know if the total number of sports children in youth-league. For example, if total number of candidates in youth-league are 400.000, there have been only ten percent injuries happened which may have been reasonable. It is not clear, however the scope and reliability of the assumption. Therefore, the author ought to give the the ratio of total number of injuries according to all related participants.
Secondly, building upon the author's argument that 40.000 sports children have suffered from injuries, we do not know which kind of sports have caused them. If they are caused by all type of athletic sports equally, this may be true. But if, the injuries are result from certain type of sports, this may not be true. We just do not know. Regardless of whether the main source of children's injuries, the author does not effectively show a connection between injuries and giving up all organized athletic competitions in youth-league.
Thirdly, while it may be true that high level of psychological pressure to youth-league soccer players exerted by coaches and parents to win games may increase the number of injuries, the author's argument does not make a concrete connection between the different level of pressure and number of injuries . Moreover, as we know, athletics includes many different games other than playing soccer such as running, swimming, long jump, archery, etc. However, we also do not know if the youths in other sports branches have been under serious pressure or not. As a result, the author's argument is not not clear enough to take an action based on this point.
Fourthly, it is easy to understand why sports children do more practise and less academic activities. If they are physically talented and definitely want to have an competitive athletic career, this decision ought to be supported. However, if they are not sure about their future goals, they should attend more academical activities until they make a choice. Consequently, having less academical lessons may have no impact on stop attending organized athletic competitions for children under nine.
All in all, if the author support his/her proposal with more statistical information which is representative and reliable, it would be more effectively dissuade parents to deter their children involving organized youth-league sports activities. But currently, it is not likely significantly persuade the Parkville children under nine not to participate youth-league athletic competitions.
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Discourse Markers used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221014492754 0.25644967241 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.150362318841 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0978260869565 0.0836205057962 117% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0797101449275 0.0520304965353 153% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0380434782609 0.0272364105082 140% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119565217391 0.125424944231 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0434782608696 0.0416121511921 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.05232483678 2.79052419416 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0235507246377 0.026700313972 88% => OK
Particles: 0.0018115942029 0.001811407834 100% => OK
Determiners: 0.0724637681159 0.113004496875 64% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0199275362319 0.0255425247493 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00724637681159 0.0127820249294 57% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3135.0 2731.13054187 115% => OK
No of words: 481.0 446.07635468 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.51767151767 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.4158004158 0.378187486979 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.326403326403 0.287650121315 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.274428274428 0.208842608468 131% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.160083160083 0.135150697306 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05232483678 2.79052419416 109% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 207.018472906 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465696465696 0.469332199767 99% => OK
Word variations: 52.9366689972 52.1807786196 101% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 20.9130434783 23.2022227129 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7002669348 57.7814097925 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.304347826 141.986410481 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9130434783 23.2022227129 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.95652173913 0.724660767414 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 3.58251231527 363% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 53.5533761186 51.9672348444 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.43243243243 1.8405768891 78% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438890625702 0.441005458295 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.146014259729 0.135418324435 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.137582658791 0.0829849096947 166% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.525500753712 0.58762219726 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.141273236366 0.147661913831 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161824563738 0.193483328276 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115783335936 0.0970749176394 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.306845053937 0.42659136922 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.134217233837 0.0774707102158 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272691840463 0.312017818177 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115420456078 0.0698173142475 165% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.87684729064 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
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Rates: 70.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the performance of average users. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations to cover all aspects.