The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
While the recommendation of the faculty committee that Seatown should implement free-tuition policy for its professors in a bid to engender retention and woo new professors may be commendable, its arguments leading to such conclusion is lacking because it made some unwarranted assumptions, omitted certain evidences that might bolster its claims and made some unsupported generalizations.
The committee cited a study conducted at nearby Oceania University whereby faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged students. This line of reasoning has several gaps. First, because Oceania University is close to Seatown does not mean they are the same. Do they have the same demographics, same size of campus, facilities or even college ranking? Therefore we cannot generalize that what affects Oceania will in the same fashion affect Seatown because they may be fundamentally different.
Now, even if the two universities are alike, we do not know anything about the modus operandi of the study conducted. Is it reflective of all the reasons while professors tend to stay put at Oceania. We are simply told vaguely that faculty retention is "higher" at Oceania. How high? Five percent higher, ten percent higher? We simply do not have enough information to compare the retention level at both schools.
Lets assume that faculty retention in Oceania is significantly higher than Seatown.Still, there is no evidence linking the "high" faculty retention in Oceania with Seatown. The reason of high retention might be because Oceania pays their professors more than Seatown. It could also be that the professors enjoy grants and other perks that are not available to professors at Seatown. Again,it might simply be for a reason that the Campus of Oceania is bigger or more serene than Seatown.
If we assume that the sole reason while more professors stay at Oceania is due to free tuition for their college aged students, still the committee went on to aver that because such measure worked at Oceania, it will work in the same manner at Seatown. What evidence do we have that the professors at Seatown have college aged students? What if they simply need pay increment or better working condition to stay?
Ultimately, the faculty committee would have had a stronger argument if it provided evidence of how Seatown and Oceania universities are alike, how the free tuition at Oceania led to faculty retention, and how the professors at Seatown are in dire need of free tuition for their children. But for failing to incorporate such evidences in its argument, the committee fails to provide a watertight argument that could make the president of Seatown University follow its lead.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, still, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2337.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 443.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27539503386 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93823347701 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460496613995 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 4.0 0.471057884232 849% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.7932705669 57.8364921388 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.85 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438713346486 0.218282227539 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130582398419 0.0743258471296 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131658321331 0.0701772020484 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240853581125 0.128457276422 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740329529732 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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