The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
The assumptions of the director of student housing at Buckingham College about building a number of new dormitories sounds illogically convincing for several reasons. The director ignored important information and some questions needed to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted results.
First, relies on the fact that the average rent for apartment in the town has risen in recent years, the director infers that student will tend more to live in dormitory. The author must answer this question whether the increasing the costs of rents relate all zones in the city. It is possible in the downtown the expense of the rent an apartment has decreased. In addition, the director must determine that whether the cost of living in dormitory is less than renting an apartment in the city. Without considering these possible scenarios, the director cannot justifiably conclude that student tend more to live in compass because of increasing the rent in out of university.
Second, relies on the fact that Buckingham’s enrollment in increasing now, it will double over the next five years. The director provides no assurance that this prediction is reliable. In fact, many factors are effective in this enhancing, which can not be the stable during this long time. For example, decreasing the rate of juveniles in over the country can affect this prediction negatively. Furthermore, establishing many colleges in other cities can decrease of the number of student in the Buckingham College. Since the author’s prediction relies on only the current trends, he cannot convince me that the number of students in this college will be doubled over 50 years.
In the third place, the soundness of the conclusion that more student will enroll in the Buckingham College because of new dormitory should be answered by the author. It is quite possible this college can not attract more students because of offering fewer funds than other colleges. Moreover, some factors such as hiring inexperienced teacher, limited major or even lack of sports facilities can discourage student to enroll in this college. Therefore, the author’s conclusion is not convincing without considering the above mentioned-factors.
In sum, the argument is flawed rationally and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen the argument, the director must provide statistical information about the cost of rent for an apartment and rate of increasing. In order to better evaluate the recommendation, we would know about all effective factors in attracting student to enroll in this college.
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as', 'in the third place']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252676659529 0.25644967241 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.141327623126 0.15541462614 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0792291220557 0.0836205057962 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0364025695931 0.0520304965353 70% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0149892933619 0.0272364105082 55% => OK
Prepositions: 0.169164882227 0.125424944231 135% => OK
Participles: 0.0471092077088 0.0416121511921 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.01038411864 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0192719486081 0.026700313972 72% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.134903640257 0.113004496875 119% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.03426124197 0.0255425247493 134% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00642398286938 0.0127820249294 50% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2632.0 2731.13054187 96% => OK
No of words: 415.0 446.07635468 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.3421686747 6.12365571057 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.421686746988 0.378187486979 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.334939759036 0.287650121315 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.240963855422 0.208842608468 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.163855421687 0.135150697306 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01038411864 2.79052419416 108% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 207.018472906 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479518072289 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 52.4004991916 52.1807786196 100% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.75 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0960345057 57.7814097925 57% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.6 141.986410481 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.7 0.724660767414 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 54.2439759036 51.9672348444 104% => OK
Elegance: 2.43333333333 1.8405768891 132% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.505709210849 0.441005458295 115% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.13815179935 0.135418324435 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0604067047023 0.0829849096947 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.61003856384 0.58762219726 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.115019053527 0.147661913831 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.223133210549 0.193483328276 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102090346318 0.0970749176394 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.494728323872 0.42659136922 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0701814457959 0.0774707102158 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.369443269783 0.312017818177 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595229005849 0.0698173142475 85% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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