The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of juniper cafe , a small, local coffee shop in the downtown area of a small American city :" we must reduce overhead here at the cafe .Instead of opening at 6 a.m. weekdays , we will now open at 8 a.m. weekdays .In weekends, we will be open from 9 a.m. until 4 p.m. . the decrease in hours of operation will help save money because we won't be paying for utilities , employee wages , or other costs during the time we are closed . this the best strategy for us to see the money and remain in business without having to eliminate jobs."
In this memorandum the cafe owner is suggesting a strategy for his cafe to remain in business by reducing the number of operating hours. This reduction would then led to saving up money which would have alternately been used up for other overheads which come with there present operating hours. However, this argument lacks any such strong evidence which would indeed help in saving the local cafe.
First of all, it has been mentioned that juniper cafe is a small local coffee shop in a small american city, thus , making it a very convinient choice for people living near this coffee shop as they must not be having a lot of choice. Considering this,one might even say that this cafe cannot afford to be closed for long hours because it might lead to significant decline in the number of customers it receives. This coffee shop can simply not afford to lose any customers at this time because of a change in schedule which is incongruent with people's needs.
The author suggests that cutting the overheads by reducing the number of operating hours will eventually help in saving money,however, he has overlooked the possiblity that the hours he has cut down might clash with the busiest time of the cafe. One cannot simply assume reduction as directly leading to saving without considering the fact that this reduction of hours could reduce the no received customers.With lesser number of customers received things could really go south for the coffee shop.
The memorandum shows that the coffee shop would open late on weekdays. This can have an adverse effect. On weekdays, most people like to have their breakfast early as they rush off to work . The late opening time of the shop may not very well suit them. Also, on weekends people have a tendency to go out in the evening in their leisure hours . The early closing of the cafe could again disparate from their customers preference.
The author needs to bolster the argument with better evidence . Considering the fact of cutting overheads, the coffee shop should be closed only at those hours when the shop sees minimum or no activity. In this way, the cost on utilties will be saved and their would be no need for any job cuts.Also, they should keep special discounts or other gifts occasionally for their regular customers as it will only enhnace thier likeness towards the shop .The ambience can be made more homely for enticing more customers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ffee shop in a small american city, thus , making it a very convinient choice for ...
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...having a lot of choice. Considering this,one might even say that this cafe cannot af...
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... could reduce the no received customers.With lesser number of customers received thi...
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...orandum shows that the coffee shop would open late on weekdays. This can have an ...
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...breakfast early as they rush off to work . The late opening time of the shop may n...
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...ut in the evening in their leisure hours . The early closing of the cafe could aga...
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...olster the argument with better evidence . Considering the fact of cutting overhea...
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...their would be no need for any job cuts.Also, they should keep special discounts or ...
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... enhnace thier likeness towards the shop .The ambience can be made more homely for...
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...nhnace thier likeness towards the shop .The ambience can be made more homely for en...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239910313901 0.25644967241 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.165919282511 0.15541462614 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0582959641256 0.0836205057962 70% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0695067264574 0.0520304965353 134% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0381165919283 0.0272364105082 140% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.134529147982 0.125424944231 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0627802690583 0.0416121511921 151% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.44728421049 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0224215246637 0.026700313972 84% => OK
Particles: 0.00896860986547 0.001811407834 495% => OK
Determiners: 0.121076233184 0.113004496875 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0515695067265 0.0255425247493 202% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0112107623318 0.0127820249294 88% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2415.0 2731.13054187 88% => OK
No of words: 417.0 446.07635468 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79136690647 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.321342925659 0.378187486979 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.208633093525 0.287650121315 73% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.151079136691 0.208842608468 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0983213429257 0.135150697306 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44728421049 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 207.018472906 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494004796163 0.469332199767 105% => OK
Word variations: 54.5741496791 52.1807786196 105% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 24.5294117647 23.2022227129 106% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.3518004836 57.7814097925 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.058823529 141.986410481 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 23.2022227129 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.724660767414 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 3.58251231527 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.3927211172 51.9672348444 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.59836065574 1.8405768891 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426019562407 0.441005458295 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.113502244924 0.135418324435 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0718178663841 0.0829849096947 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.570423707414 0.58762219726 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.151638932782 0.147661913831 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173870611959 0.193483328276 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101542548223 0.0970749176394 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328000108054 0.42659136922 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.055981791153 0.0774707102158 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271268727263 0.312017818177 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432208190561 0.0698173142475 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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