The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors:"Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellit

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The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors:
"Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now."

As the author of the newsletter offer advice to investors that, Techcorporation is their top pick for investments this term. AS the company developed the satellite technology in first time in ten years which is approved by FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. And the current satellite company dissatisfied over eighty percents of the customers in last year. Therefore, the author thinks clients of the newsletter should do investments in this company. But, there are some of questions need to be answered by the author to make this statement gain more weight. So that clients of the newsletter believe in them claim of the author. the questions needs to be answered are as follows.

First, the author stated that the techcorporation ihas developed satellite technology which has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. But, the author did not mentioned any long form of the FTA and he didnot even mentioned that is FTA any government company or any private company which approves to compete with the other satellite provider. If FTA is not genuine company then the argument is not trustable.

Second, the author also states that the last year survey indicate that the over eighty percent of the respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider. But, the author has not stated any surveys of the Technocorporation is the which indicating any decrease or increase in the service satisfaction. Which makes statement of author to fail.

As from the above all questions are not answered by the author in recommendation for investing in to the Techcorporation which makes the statement fail.

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GMAT/GRE Argument Task

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “AS” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eir top pick for investments this term. AS the company developed the satellite tec...
^^
Line 1, column 484, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the questions') or simply say ''some questions''.
Suggestion: some of the questions; some questions
...stments in this company. But, there are some of questions need to be answered by the author to ma...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 577, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o make this statement gain more weight. So that clients of the newsletter believe in th...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 648, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...er believe in them claim of the author. the questions needs to be answered are as f...
^^^
Line 1, column 662, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'need'.
Suggestion: need
...them claim of the author. the questions needs to be answered are as follows. First...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
...llite provider. But, the author did not mentioned any long form of the FTA and he didnot ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...pete with the other satellite provider. If FTA is not genuine company then the arg...
^^
Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r increase in the service satisfaction. Which makes statement of author to fail. A...
^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.276666666667 0.25644967241 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.17 0.15541462614 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0566666666667 0.0836205057962 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0266666666667 0.0520304965353 51% => OK
Pronouns: 0.01 0.0272364105082 37% => OK
Prepositions: 0.14 0.125424944231 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0433333333333 0.0416121511921 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9436497203 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0366666666667 0.026700313972 137% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.153333333333 0.113004496875 136% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00666666666667 0.0255425247493 26% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0166666666667 0.0127820249294 130% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1713.0 2731.13054187 63% => OK
No of words: 279.0 446.07635468 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.13978494624 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.57801047555 89% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372759856631 0.378187486979 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.297491039427 0.287650121315 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21146953405 0.208842608468 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.161290322581 0.135150697306 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9436497203 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 207.018472906 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.469332199767 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.8564061896 52.1807786196 80% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9285714286 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2615077609 57.7814097925 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.357142857 141.986410481 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.724660767414 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.6776753712 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.22580645161 1.8405768891 121% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406789221558 0.441005458295 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.161610915825 0.135418324435 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103668694025 0.0829849096947 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.630311771969 0.58762219726 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170419771847 0.147661913831 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205731954595 0.193483328276 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089468316118 0.0970749176394 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.522620396241 0.42659136922 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0369177085198 0.0774707102158 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296304133125 0.312017818177 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100075980908 0.0698173142475 143% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “AS” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eir top pick for investments this term. AS the company developed the satellite tec...
^^
Line 1, column 484, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the questions') or simply say ''some questions''.
Suggestion: some of the questions; some questions
...stments in this company. But, there are some of questions need to be answered by the author to ma...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 577, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o make this statement gain more weight. So that clients of the newsletter believe in th...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 648, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...er believe in them claim of the author. the questions needs to be answered are as f...
^^^
Line 1, column 662, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'need'.
Suggestion: need
...them claim of the author. the questions needs to be answered are as follows. First...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
...llite provider. But, the author did not mentioned any long form of the FTA and he didnot ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...pete with the other satellite provider. If FTA is not genuine company then the arg...
^^
Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...r increase in the service satisfaction. Which makes statement of author to fail. A...
^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.276666666667 0.25644967241 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.17 0.15541462614 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0566666666667 0.0836205057962 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0266666666667 0.0520304965353 51% => OK
Pronouns: 0.01 0.0272364105082 37% => OK
Prepositions: 0.14 0.125424944231 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0433333333333 0.0416121511921 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9436497203 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0366666666667 0.026700313972 137% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.153333333333 0.113004496875 136% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00666666666667 0.0255425247493 26% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0166666666667 0.0127820249294 130% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1713.0 2731.13054187 63% => OK
No of words: 279.0 446.07635468 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.13978494624 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.57801047555 89% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372759856631 0.378187486979 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.297491039427 0.287650121315 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21146953405 0.208842608468 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.161290322581 0.135150697306 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9436497203 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 207.018472906 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.469332199767 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 41.8564061896 52.1807786196 80% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 19.9285714286 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2615077609 57.7814097925 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.357142857 141.986410481 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 23.2022227129 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.571428571429 0.724660767414 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.6776753712 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.22580645161 1.8405768891 121% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406789221558 0.441005458295 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.161610915825 0.135418324435 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103668694025 0.0829849096947 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.630311771969 0.58762219726 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170419771847 0.147661913831 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205731954595 0.193483328276 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089468316118 0.0970749176394 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.522620396241 0.42659136922 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0369177085198 0.0774707102158 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296304133125 0.312017818177 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100075980908 0.0698173142475 143% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.