The following appeared in a newspaper article about law firms in the city of Megalopolis. "in Megalopolis, the number of law school graduates who went to work for large, corporate firms declined by 15% over the last three years, whereas an increasing num

In the newspaper article, based on a survey, the author claims that job satisfaction in graduated students of law school in Megalopolis takes precedence over high salaries; that is why they prefer to be hired in small firms rather than large ones. Although the writer of this article tries to propose certain reasons to persuade the readers about the decline in the enthusiasm of law school graduates to get a job in large companies, from my perspective, this article is flawed for several reasons that I discuss bellow.

Firstly, though the exact percent of the declined job in large firms is stated, it is not mentioned in the passage that by what percent the number of graduates increased in small firms. As far as this amount is not clarified, we can’t infer the severity of this change. Further, the precise number of small and large companies three years ago are not mentioned. This issue is essential since statistics work with the proportional values; thus, it would be much reliable if the number of graduates per company, whether large or small, could be calculated separately and then, compare these numbers to each other as good measures.

Moreover, the survey conducted on first-year students is spurious since this research is related to the graduated students; therefore, the representatives of this survey are incorrectly collected and we can’t generalize the findings to the graduated students. Furthermore, the term job satisfaction is vague. It should be delineated in order to obviate any misunderstanding. For instance, some people define job satisfaction as shorter working hours while others consider longer vacation times for this term. Thus, not only does the survey clarify this term, but also it fails to conduct research using a suitable representatives.

Thirdly, some graduates of law schools may prefer to work outside Megalopolis but it appears that this article considered only the companies located in this area. It is apparent that the author has overlooked this issue since some students live in other states and return to their cities when graduated. Therefore, the conclusion of this article rests under the assumption that all of the graduated students of this school should find a job in this region.

In sum, despite several flawed assumptions discussed above, the writer of this article can strengthen it if they eliminate all doubts and find out what should be altered in order to motivate graduated students of law school to be hired in large companies

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 620, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'representative'?
Suggestion: representative
...ls to conduct research using a suitable representatives. Thirdly, some graduates of law scho...
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Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...article rests under the assumption that all of the graduated students of this school shoul...
^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'thirdly', 'thus', 'while', 'for instance']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230769230769 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.164835164835 0.15541462614 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0813186813187 0.0836205057962 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0549450549451 0.0520304965353 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0307692307692 0.0272364105082 113% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134065934066 0.125424944231 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0461538461538 0.0416121511921 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82477909266 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0285714285714 0.026700313972 107% => OK
Particles: 0.0021978021978 0.001811407834 121% => OK
Determiners: 0.123076923077 0.113004496875 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0197802197802 0.0255425247493 77% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010989010989 0.0127820249294 86% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2516.0 2731.13054187 92% => OK
No of words: 408.0 446.07635468 91% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16666666667 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.392156862745 0.378187486979 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.301470588235 0.287650121315 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.205882352941 0.208842608468 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.147058823529 0.135150697306 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82477909266 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 207.018472906 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514705882353 0.469332199767 110% => OK
Word variations: 57.3607472319 52.1807786196 110% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 27.2 23.2022227129 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.5857129357 57.7814097925 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.733333333 141.986410481 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 23.2022227129 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.13333333333 0.724660767414 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 57.3470588235 51.9672348444 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.64035087719 1.8405768891 89% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476133974269 0.441005458295 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.132739576188 0.135418324435 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0862075441423 0.0829849096947 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.6094639395 0.58762219726 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.195178244506 0.147661913831 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.204326471906 0.193483328276 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121538622323 0.0970749176394 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.390785781439 0.42659136922 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0256181270957 0.0774707102158 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328158673445 0.312017818177 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945907952339 0.0698173142475 135% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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