The following appeared as part of an annual report sent to stockholders by Olympic Foods, a processor of frozen foods:
“Over time, the costs of processing go down because as organizations learn how to do things better, they become more efficient. In color film processing, for example, the cost of a 3-by-5-inch print fell from 50 cents for five-day service in 1970 to 20 cents for one-day service in 1984. The same principle applies to the processing of food. And since Olympic Foods will soon celebrate its 25th birthday, we can expect that our long experience will enable us to minimize costs and thus maximize profits.”
The above argument tries to establish a direct link between cost-efficiency and experience. It states that as time goes the colour film processing is becoming more efficient as organizations acquire new technologies to produce. So the author implies that this idea also applied to a processor of frozen food company as it has already operated approximately 25 years. However, the author’s line of thoughts is not very convincing. He has not been able to give logics for his reasons as the processor of frozen food and colour film processing are very different from each other to be compared. Also, as time goes the demand for the first has increased substantially whereas the demand for the frozen food is not high since the healthy life style has become widely propagandised. And finally, over time the technology used in food processing is getting more advanced and it is costly to install it.
The author has talked about increased profits and decreased costs in film processing and assumed that the same situation will be experienced in a processing food firm. However, he has skipped the assumption that these productions are totally different and making simile is not logically correct. They use various inputs and produce different outputs. The increased efficiency with long experience in one sphere does not signify the same impact in the other one. Therefore, the author should have strengthened his argument by providing a comparison of more identical spheres.
One must understand that for the mentioned period of time the film processing might be successful and accordingly the production for those conditions is more cost effective. However, it might be that the frozen food production now is less requested as such factors as healthy life style has significant effect on demand. Some researchers suggest that the frozen foods promote diseases, so this kind of claims affects market negatively. Decrease demand makes companies spend more on marketing and advertisements, as a result of which the costs are increasing. Hence, even if the technology advances it does no mean that the production will be more lucrative.
Another point is that to be more efficient firms should use latest technologies. Even if the technology advances, not all companies might install this updated equipment as it requires huge funding to purchase it. Moreover, it is probable that old staff is not aware of using this updated equipment some firms should attract new personnel who are able to use it. The specialists who are able to use new technologies require higher salaries. Because of these costs companies might use old equipment which is not as efficient as new ones.
In short, we could say that the author could not support his argument. He has not supplied any evidence to prove his point. This comparison is not logically correct. He should have studied similar cases of other food processing producers. Before any decision is made, all these things mast be considered, not simply the years of experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'finally', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'whereas', 'in short', 'kind of', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233208955224 0.25644967241 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.179104477612 0.15541462614 115% => OK
Adjectives: 0.106343283582 0.0836205057962 127% => OK
Adverbs: 0.080223880597 0.0520304965353 154% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0373134328358 0.0272364105082 137% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.108208955224 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0466417910448 0.0416121511921 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8593631211 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0205223880597 0.026700313972 77% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0970149253731 0.113004496875 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0242537313433 0.0255425247493 95% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00746268656716 0.0127820249294 58% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3034.0 2731.13054187 111% => OK
No of words: 491.0 446.07635468 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17922606925 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.374745417515 0.378187486979 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.285132382892 0.287650121315 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.213849287169 0.208842608468 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.16700610998 0.135150697306 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8593631211 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 207.018472906 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486761710794 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 56.3705774604 52.1807786196 108% => OK
How many sentences: 27.0 20.039408867 135% => OK
Sentence length: 18.1851851852 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1703279643 57.7814097925 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.37037037 141.986410481 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1851851852 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.724660767414 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.14285714286 136% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 46.6984234744 51.9672348444 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.30817610063 1.8405768891 71% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304275244271 0.441005458295 69% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0953432311059 0.135418324435 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0733491186097 0.0829849096947 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.52979774201 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.111169554725 0.147661913831 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106835333246 0.193483328276 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052717026864 0.0970749176394 54% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.225185655211 0.42659136922 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0774835927653 0.0774707102158 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16363230344 0.312017818177 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702763807823 0.0698173142475 101% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.82512315271 187% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 6.46551724138 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 14.657635468 157% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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