The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
There is a research that illustrates the connection between the average number of employees’ sleeping hours per night and the success of the company. After collecting the information of 300 male and female advertising executives, it suggests that the firms whose advertising executives who sleep less than 6 hours per night would have higher profit and faster growth. The arguer, therefore, claims that entrepreneurs should hire those who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night. However, the argument is unconvincing because it relies on a sort of equivocal assumptions.
According to the article, the conclusion of employees who sleep less than 6 hours per night will be beneficial for a company’s profit and growth is based on the information of advertising executives. Nevertheless, the arguer infers that any other business should select the workers who sleep less than 6 hours per night. It seems that the arguer misinterprets the study. For instance, Isis, a Muslim country, is cruel and notorious, but it would be a misinterpretation of all Muslims are cruel and notorious. In conclusion, it will be unacceptable to indicate a business should hire those who sleep less than 6 hours per night to achieve higher profit and faster growth.
There is an unstated assumption of the argument is whether the employees are working when they are awake. It could be possible that these employees who sleep less than 6 hours per night only work for a few hours. Furthermore, their effectiveness on jobs could also be a question. Despite these employees truly work for more than 18 hours per day, they could make a mistake easily because of a lack of sleeping hours. Any of these scenarios, if true, would undermine the claim that a business whose employees sleep less than 6 hours has higher profit and faster growth.
On the other hand, the outcome of 6 hours is an average number from the study. It needs to be clarified if advertising executives sleep equal 6 hours every day. One of the specialties of advertising industries is their creativity. The advertising executives may continuously work for several days when they have inspiration, and that is very different from other business. It could be a positive connection between working hours and the successful to ordinary companies whereas the advertising business focus on the works they completed. This underlying difference will make the presumption of high profit and faster growth being dubious.
To sum up, the relation of less sleeping and higher profit and faster growth is unreasonable. There are so many unwarranted inferences and essential diversities between advertising industries and other business. Without the stronger evidence, we should be wary about admitting the argument that the companies hire the employees who sleep less than 6 hours have higher profit and faster growth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
There is a research that illustrates the connection between...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, sort of, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 465.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17849462366 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96914101352 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.410752688172 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2183098494 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.695652174 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2173913043 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25979779599 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911684977765 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673151174613 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170702345913 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610728778763 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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