The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:"The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is esse

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The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:
"The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population."

As per the petition from environment protection group, the Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land which is part of Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. Also, the author provided some unwarranted assumptions to support his views. This assumptions are based on wrong points, this can be explained in further paragraphs.

As the author says Smith Corporation is trying to develop the land which is part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. Also, the sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species which lives in that area. Development of this land will result into disastrous consequences for the sanctuary. The company trying to build a small hotel on the land. Also, the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve is mainly relies upon the tourists who visit primary to see our magnificent bird population. Also, the authors did not think that, the hotel which is going to build by the Smith Corporation will result into the increase in number of the tourists.

Also, the Smith Corporation promised that their plans will do anything but harm the the sanctuary. For which, they may do some other arrangements for not to harm the Wildlife Preserve. Smith Corporation may thinking of something like the environment loving materials using for the hotel.

Therefore, I think the author assumption to get to the final results are unwarranted.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...mith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land which is part of You...
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...anted assumptions to support his views. This assumptions are based on wrong points, ...
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... be explained in further paragraphs. As the author says Smith Corporation is tr...
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... increase in number of the tourists. Also, the Smith Corporation promised that th...
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...t their plans will do anything but harm the the sanctuary. For which, they may do some ...
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...t their plans will do anything but harm the the sanctuary. For which, they may do some ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'i think']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.275720164609 0.25644967241 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.168724279835 0.15541462614 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0493827160494 0.0836205057962 59% => OK
Adverbs: 0.037037037037 0.0520304965353 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0205761316872 0.0272364105082 76% => OK
Prepositions: 0.106995884774 0.125424944231 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0329218106996 0.0416121511921 79% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81104668604 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0411522633745 0.026700313972 154% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.144032921811 0.113004496875 127% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0288065843621 0.0255425247493 113% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0246913580247 0.0127820249294 193% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1361.0 2731.13054187 50% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 220.0 446.07635468 49% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.18636363636 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 4.57801047555 84% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.340909090909 0.378187486979 90% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.268181818182 0.287650121315 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222727272727 0.208842608468 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.163636363636 0.135150697306 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81104668604 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 207.018472906 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527272727273 0.469332199767 112% => OK
Word variations: 48.0987978378 52.1807786196 92% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.039408867 65% => OK
Sentence length: 16.9230769231 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1035687597 57.7814097925 52% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.692307692 141.986410481 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9230769231 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.538461538462 0.724660767414 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 43.7412587413 51.9672348444 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.83636363636 1.8405768891 100% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.628808728589 0.441005458295 143% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.13746202334 0.135418324435 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.088977837854 0.0829849096947 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.643852726501 0.58762219726 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156122253459 0.147661913831 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.297144584332 0.193483328276 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.173822709049 0.0970749176394 179% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.415846250848 0.42659136922 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.133314526264 0.0774707102158 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.414733448814 0.312017818177 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145292552855 0.0698173142475 208% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.87684729064 44% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 5.36822660099 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 14.657635468 48% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 41.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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