The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author concludes that that entry of the illegal immigrants should be checked with stringent rules so as to eliminate the threats to nations economy and national identity due to that. But there are certain flaws in the argument. I would suggest a basis to strengthen this rgument.
Firstly, the autonomy or independence of a country depends on the political powers ruling the country and the nation's population itself, as to how they allow themselves to be treated by the others. It has been well asserted by the author that illegal immigrants pose threat to the economy and national identity. It can only be possible if the citizens of that country allow immigrants with the rights to pose a threat to them. Nevertheless, the independence of the citizens is a factor of political freedom provided by its government, not the cause of illegal immigrants entering that nation.
Secondly, it cannot be so aptly said that the strength of borders are not the only factor responsible to entry of illegal immigrants, it may the strength of border security forces or their carelessness over the security national borders.
Thirdly, undoubtably the immigration results in formation of heterogenous population in the country. But as stated, illegal immigrants pose threat to the nation, all should not be made to return to their home country. It may be possible that some immigrants, not all are harmful. Rather some may bring pride and profits to the nation. If these people are sent back to their country, any how the economy will be affected. There should be some barrier to check the number of illegal immigrants posing threat to the country.
Fourthly, I somehow contradict and support the author's point of view. To support, it has been stated that illegal immigrants do pose severe threat to the economy and thus ruin the peace of the nation. There should be some stringent laws to abolish the entry of such individuals and keep a strict check over this issue.
To sum up, I would say that the illegal immigrants though pose a threat to the economy, but not all of them are causative of it. Asking all to leave the nation without any enquiry would be waspish and unjustifiable. Also the strength of borders is not just a determinant of its solid strength or security force, but it also depends on the skill and training given to security force and their attentiveness. Moreover, the autonomy of the nation is not at all dependent on the number of illegal immigrants entering that country, infact it depends of the citizen's thought and will.
Comments
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... should be checked with stringent rules so as to eliminate the threats to nations econom...
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Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... threats to nations economy and national identity due to that. But there are cert...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...tical powers ruling the country and the nations population itself, as to how they allow...
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Line 7, column 281, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...t some immigrants, not all are harmful. Rather some may bring pride and profits to the...
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Line 11, column 217, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...iry would be waspish and unjustifiable. Also the strength of borders is not just a d...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'thus', 'well', 'as to', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233050847458 0.25644967241 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.139830508475 0.15541462614 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0656779661017 0.0836205057962 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0529661016949 0.0520304965353 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0487288135593 0.0272364105082 179% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.103813559322 0.125424944231 83% => OK
Participles: 0.0381355932203 0.0416121511921 92% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71717751105 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0508474576271 0.026700313972 190% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0021186440678 0.001811407834 117% => OK
Determiners: 0.139830508475 0.113004496875 124% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0296610169492 0.0255425247493 116% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00423728813559 0.0127820249294 33% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2552.0 2731.13054187 93% => OK
No of words: 432.0 446.07635468 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90740740741 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377314814815 0.378187486979 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.293981481481 0.287650121315 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.185185185185 0.208842608468 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.101851851852 0.135150697306 75% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71717751105 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 207.018472906 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428240740741 0.469332199767 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.3911465486 52.1807786196 89% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.039408867 105% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5714285714 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6762671005 57.7814097925 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.523809524 141.986410481 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 0.724660767414 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 49.9695767196 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.55263157895 1.8405768891 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.542381945068 0.441005458295 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114921626922 0.135418324435 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0746073804253 0.0829849096947 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.604218004352 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.175636236306 0.147661913831 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.242452209838 0.193483328276 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114193085023 0.0970749176394 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.456845764012 0.42659136922 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.048564632532 0.0774707102158 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.382890682786 0.312017818177 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753009391711 0.0698173142475 108% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.87684729064 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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