The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria.
"Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry. In order to stop the erosion, we should charge people for using the beaches. Although this solution may annoy a few tourists in the short term,
it will reduce the number of people using the beaches and will raise money for replenishing the sand. Replenishing the sand, as was done to protect buildings on the nearby island of Batia, will help protect buildings along our shores, thereby reducing these
buildings' risk of additional damage from severe storms. And since the areas along the shore will be more attractive as a result, the beaches will be preserved and the area's tourist industry will improve over the long term."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidences is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidences would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The Following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Taria. Author made conclusion that, because of erosion of sand they should charge people for replenishing sand. since beaches and building in the area will be preserved, Tria's tourist industry will improve over the long term. There are several assumption made by author which need specific evidences.
Firstly, Author states Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is serious threat to our island and our tourist industry.Author further state that, In order to stop the erosion, we should charge people for using the beaches. Author need evidences about people who using beaches, whether they really use beach or they might be tourist who came for enjoyment for holiday. There are several reason for erosion of beach, it might possiblity of species which are from number of years kill an other species for survival, so they produce noscious smell, erosion for surrounding area.
Secondly, Author state that, solution for reducing erosion may annoy a few tourist in short term, it will raise money of replenishing the sand. Author need of evidence about the fund alloted by government, to replenishing the sand and beach related activity. Author need to survey about shore situation, maintainance of beach, whether this activity on regular basis happen or not. Author need to survey tourist review, whether they really agree to paying extra money for replenishing of sand.
Thirdly, Author mention that Replenishing the sand protect building on nearby island of batia, will help protect building along shores, by reducing risk of additional damage from severe storms. Author need specific evidences, which shows previous storms which occur damage to surrounding building area. It might possiblity that, the building which cited near to beach are bulited by far years ago, so they damage. On this basis, states that beaches and buliding in the area will be preserved, Tria's tourist industry will improve over the long term. Author made strong assumption that, by implementing this solution, tourist industry will improve over long term. Author need evidences those tourist who book there tour though tourist company. It might possiblity that people selflly arrange thing, don't prefer tourist company. In that case, statement may weaken.
In an conclusion, author need to survey all point before making any conclusion. There are several assumption made by author which need an specific evidence.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2033 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.082 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.329 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.792 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...ld charge people for replenishing sand. since beaches and building in the area will b...
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Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...l improve over the long term. There are several assumption made by author which need specific evid...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 322, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
...e over the long term. There are several assumption made by author which need specific evid...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Author
... to our island and our tourist industry.Author further state that, In order to stop th...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...me for enjoyment for holiday. There are several reason for erosion of beach, it might possibli...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: AN_OTHER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: another
...ies which are from number of years kill an other species for survival, so they produce n...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 382, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ctivity on regular basis happen or not. Author need to survey tourist review, whether ...
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Line 7, column 798, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...lity that people selflly arrange thing, dont prefer tourist company. In that case, s...
^^^^
Line 9, column 4, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... that case, statement may weaken. In an conclusion, author need to survey all p...
^^
Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...before making any conclusion. There are several assumption made by author which need an specific e...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 99, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
...aking any conclusion. There are several assumption made by author which need an specific e...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 136, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...al assumption made by author which need an specific evidence.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as to, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27135678392 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44267630037 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452261306533 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6219902763 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.9047619048 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9523809524 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300261610505 0.218282227539 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942639810525 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127071570081 0.0701772020484 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181814087845 0.128457276422 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142594711282 0.0628817314937 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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