The following is a letter from the parent of a private school student to the principal of that school:
Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable – my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring Swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is just going to cause students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The passage describes a letter from a parent to the principal of a school that hired a new private vendor to the school's cafiteria. The parent is angry and affraid that their kid will not be able to consume the cafiteria's "low-fat, low-calorie meals" because they will not be tasty and "enjoyable" for them. Yet, the letter is falsly assuming several assumptions that could and should be checked in order to shed a light on the real situation from the principal perspective and from the whole groip of the students perspective as well.
First, it seems that the parent is drawing a conclustion on the general population of school attendees based on his child alone. It is really unclear how many kids are in the same situation as the one of the letter writer. Therefore, it will be wise to ask how many kids will be able to consume the foods from the new cafiteria and how many will not be able to use their services. So questions that clarify the numbers of each groups as well as the current state that have been before the cafeteria has been given to Swift (it is unclear if there has been operational cafeteria before), will make the conclusions of the parent much more addressable.
Secondly, it is not well established that food in cafeteria is at all causing effect in a notable level of school children. In my personal experience, for example, I used to go for long hours to a school without a cafiteris and it did not affect my health at all. It should be questioned then, if the cafeteria has any practical effect on the kids health
An issue that is strongly connected to this one is how many hours to the school kids attend. It is imaginable that eight hours day will require a different approach then five hours school day. Question as such should be raised and answered since they have a crucial effect on the food policy of the school.
Yet another issue, is the question of the quality of food that parents provide for their children. Parents can, at least theoretically, provide healthy food that will keep their kids studying better and will be less affected from sugar and gluten intoxication. So it should be asked why the parent that composed the letter made the uncalled leap which reckons that parents will make an unhealthy meal for their childes. Considering all of the above it is really call for questioning how reasonable that a cafeteria with a food that is known in advance to be unhealthy will turn out to be healthier to kids from the current state of operation.
To conclude, providing a healthy meal for school children is not as simple as it may seem. To ensure that children will be provided with salubrious food it is definitly wise to conduct a research and not rush into conclusions based on one of many kids. Answering the questions that have been raised in this short essay, will help the parents and the school principal to address the issue in a better, more logical, and less emotional way. A way that will provide the best solution to most of the school's students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 527, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...pective and from the whole groip of the students perspective as well. First, it seem...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 433, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...thy meal for their childes. Considering all of the above it is really call for questioning...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 463, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'called'.
Suggestion: called
...nsidering all of the above it is really call for questioning how reasonable that a c...
^^^^
Line 9, column 521, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'food'.
Suggestion: food
...ng how reasonable that a cafeteria with a food that is known in advance to be unhealth...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, at least, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2506.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 537.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65777910991 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437616387337 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2305683822 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.3 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.85 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197084906477 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707259579569 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645309487154 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112252704183 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659588181175 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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