The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants.
"Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
It seem that customers are not able to distinguish between margarine and butter or they use the term butter to refer to either butter or margarine, but there is lot of weakness in the argument.
Less number of complaints does not mean people refer to margarine or butter as same and are happy when they are served either. Most of the people comes with families in Happy Pancake house and usually Happy Panckes are very crowded, it takes a lot of time to register a complaints. Maybe many people are unhappy, but to save time they prefer not registering complaints.
It is stated that 2 percent of customers have complained and people are happy with happy, but it does not mean that people can not distinguish between margarine or butter. Maybe people prefer margarine over butter. Happy Pancake house is famous for its panckes that taste better with margarine. In a survey conducted last year, people admitted that they prefer pancake with margarine over butter.
Furthermore, margarine containing pancakes are much expensive than butter pancakes in all other food shops. Getting margarine containing pancakes at same price had made people more happy. Further Happy Pancakes are offering free coffee with margarine panckes in order to increase initial sale which have further appeased lot of unsatisfied consumers.
Moreover, people does not complain when they are given margarine instead of butter, in a poll conducted few months ago in southwestern United States,margarine was voted on number one as side food complement while having dinner, butter was voted third. People are more satisfied when servers provides them margarine because most of them like margarine. Clearly people are able to distinguish between margarine and butter as they are most popular complementary food products.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 290 350
No. of Characters: 1473 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.079 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.484 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.498 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.357 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.444 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.444 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.17 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
It seem that customers are not able to distingu...
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Line 2, column 268, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a complaint' or simply 'complaints'?
Suggestion: a complaint; complaints
...ded, it takes a lot of time to register a complaints. Maybe many people are unhappy, but to ...
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Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , margarine
...months ago in southwestern United States,margarine was voted on number one as side food co...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, may, moreover, so, third, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.9520958084 8% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 289.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21453287197 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63634669015 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494809688581 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7456352774 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.642857143 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23139971266 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982024349795 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517042350242 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142683154716 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454510713511 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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