The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The recommendation that Monarch should open a cafe by discontinuing the children's books section doesn't seems to be a prudent decision. The various points suggested by Board are rife with flaws and proper evidence is needed to justify each of the argument which are taken as basis for the decision.
First, board of directors Monarch is having the business of books since past 20 years and is known for his eclectic selection of books. Also, since he is having good customer base so it will aid in promoting his cafe too. However, Monarch's success in the business of books cannot be taken as a face value to start his new cafe. There is no such evidence provided by the board that whether he is having any experience in running cafe or not. If and only if, he is having some experience of the same then it generates one reason to support the decision but if he has no prior experience then this decision may prove detrimental to his profits and revenues. Also, people if dissatisfied from his cafe can even turn to some other shops for book purchase as well which in turn will further exacerbate his current business.
Also, Board of director used the recent National census data to conclude that since there is significant decline in the percentage of population under ten so, shutting down the children's section is a good option. Nevertheless, there is no evidence that population of children under ten has declines in the place where Monarch dwells and if it has declined then what is the percentage. Also, is this drop in his place significant enough to close the children's section ? Unless, board of directors do not provide facts and figures pertaining to these questions, reaching to any conclusion will not be good. Also, since the trend in decline in population of children under ten is observed recently we vividly don't have any answers about the upcoming years. Hence, only after observing that children's section selling is not upto a certain benchmark, it is good to shut down the same.
Furthermore, Board of directors claims that opening a cafe will allow Monarch to better compete with Regal books, who also has just opened a cafe. Here also, there are facts presented about the background of Regal books owner. Does he have any experience in the field of running cafe ? How is the customer base of Regal in comparison to Monarch ? So, if Regal book's owner turned out to be a person who has owned several good cafe's in the past then Regal's cafe will have more propitious signs of beating the Monarch's cafe.
Additionally, there is no mention of the presence of the other cafe's in the region nearby to Monarch's bookstore. What if there are already well-established cafes there? What if those cafe are already very reasonable ? So, if this is the situation then opening cafe in the store is apparently not a good decision.
In a nutshell, all the questions presented above cast doubt on the decision suggested by the board of directors. So, unless answers to all these questions aren't known and we don't have any concrete evidences favoring the opening of cafe in store by shutting down the children's section, it will not be wise to reach to any point.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 190, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this cafe' or 'those cafes', 'those caves'?
Suggestion: this cafe; those cafes; those caves
...y well established cafes there? What if those cafe are already very reasonable ? So, if th...
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Line 9, column 231, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hose cafe are already very reasonable ? So, if this is the situation then opening cafe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 55.5748502994 157% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2706.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 567.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77248677249 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51433363526 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432098765432 0.468620217663 92% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.471057884232 849% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2226512395 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.24 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.68 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249151919825 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079786067145 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683901775366 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13751589424 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049483474452 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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