An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
It will become a terrible decided if the government of Tagus to promote this new type of millet. There are so many reasons in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the statement claims that vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus. This view have not any preposition. There are need more proof to ensure this country people are lack vitamin A. Even if they all need to supple vitamin A, does it has effect their life? There said that this organization has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A, can this ensure it has not lost other useful nutrient substance? Does it has any other side effects? Does this millet need longer planting time? These questions still need to solve.
Secondly, this short statement claims while seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. But they still don’t think about it: Is it more difficult to grow now variety of millet than normal millet? Will they be particularly fragile? Is the poverty of this country due to government corruption? If so, farmers will not be subsidies and they won’t buy expensive seeds.
Thirdly, the statement claims since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. Only part of people dare to try new type of millet and most of people dare not to try it. Because it is a poor country, most of people are poor and dare not venture to buy new thing. From their psychology, if it does not tasted good, then the money will be wasted. They do not want the possibility of wasting money.
Finally, the statement claims the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. We should know anyone has freedom to choose. For poor farmers, the government’s promote is meaningless, they just need to eat enough. They do not realize they may lack vitamin A.
To sum up, it is not necessary to promote this new type of millet.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1570 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.46 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.328 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.075 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.508 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 275, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
...y all need to supple vitamin A, does it has effect their life? There said that this...
^^^
Line 3, column 275, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: have
...y all need to supple vitamin A, does it has effect their life? There said that this...
^^^
Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
...ther useful nutrient substance? Does it has any other side effects? Does this mille...
^^^
Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: have
...ther useful nutrient substance? Does it has any other side effects? Does this mille...
^^^
Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ople dare to try new type of millet and most of people dare not to try it. Because it is a poo...
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Line 7, column 242, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...o try it. Because it is a poor country, most of people are poor and dare not venture to buy ne...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 343, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'taste'
Suggestion: taste
.... From their psychology, if it does not tasted good, then the money will be wasted. Th...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, while, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68857142857 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49737985145 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477142857143 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3914339919 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.64 119.503703932 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.0 23.324526521 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462331280572 0.218282227539 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11571272863 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109168016193 0.0701772020484 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23380002434 0.128457276422 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659626614174 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 14.3799401198 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.3550499002 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.33 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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