An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The author here states that international development organization found deficiency of Vitamin A in the nation of Tagus and to rectify this they have engineered a new breed of millet which is high in Vitamin A. He also mentions that since the price of this new millet is higher, government would be providing subsidies for farming the new variety of millet.
Author substantially concentrates on using the new highly improvised millet instead of making people aware of other natural sources of vitamin. Even though it cost higher government is paying subsides to the former, I appreciate the initiative taken buy the government. on the other hand, government could simultaneously taken initiatives to motivate farmers to grow natural food which would be healthy for health.
Author says that government should do everything to promote this new type of millet. Instead, government could also promote other natural sources of Vitamin A which people of the country might have easy and readily access but might not be aware of its ingredients. If t6hey take such initiatives, government will also not lose in providing subsidies to the farmer. Also it would be a long term promotional affect. I mean that cultivation of the new millet can not be for a long time nor can people afford it always in day to day life. Even if they use it now and later again there are chances for the deficiency to occur again. Where as if people are educated regarding the natural sources of Vitamin A and its advantages, they will bring it in their natural diet and such scenario of deficiency will never happen again.
I appreciate all the initiatives taken by the government and the international development organization to look after the country and taking all steps possible. however, there are many other possible steps they can follow which would help cure the country for a long run. Country should be provided with a permanent solution instead of temporal one. The government might be trying to take advantage of the scenario and have an intention to make money at the cost of nation's health. I feel so because these organic millet are not good for health. there are many other natural sources which government did not intent to project to the people.
In the end, I would like to conclude that the government is doing a great job by looking after there nation and its people. they are doing everything possible to make them deficiency free. However, other points could be taken into consideration. This would ensure a healthy governance and healthy nation. It would be nice if government can do everything to make country Vitamin A deficient free rather than making sure millet usability.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'regarding', 'so', 'i feel', 'i mean', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229813664596 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.167701863354 0.15541462614 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.111801242236 0.0836205057962 134% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0600414078675 0.0520304965353 115% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0455486542443 0.0272364105082 167% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.107660455487 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0414078674948 0.0416121511921 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72682202034 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0331262939959 0.026700313972 124% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0828157349896 0.113004496875 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0455486542443 0.0255425247493 178% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0124223602484 0.0127820249294 97% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2685.0 2731.13054187 98% => OK
No of words: 451.0 446.07635468 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.9534368071 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.345898004435 0.378187486979 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.263858093126 0.287650121315 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.152993348115 0.208842608468 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117516629712 0.135150697306 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72682202034 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 207.018472906 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443458980044 0.469332199767 94% => OK
Word variations: 48.9246588699 52.1807786196 94% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.6086956522 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0065728035 57.7814097925 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.739130435 141.986410481 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6086956522 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.434782608696 0.724660767414 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 45.9945049648 51.9672348444 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.38636363636 1.8405768891 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.425120746701 0.441005458295 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109616528283 0.135418324435 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0766954935819 0.0829849096947 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.475430012068 0.58762219726 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.162068000644 0.147661913831 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142099649827 0.193483328276 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121972664936 0.0970749176394 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.385649663396 0.42659136922 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0353292027518 0.0774707102158 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295662123983 0.312017818177 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144254398553 0.0698173142475 207% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.33743842365 216% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.87684729064 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 6.46551724138 217% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 5.36822660099 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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