An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In response to a Vitamin A deficiency among the people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, an international development organization has engineered a new breed of millet high in Vitamin A. Consequently, the government should do everything it can do to promote the new type of millet. The conclusion is based on the following assumptions: 1)Impoverished nation of Tagus "only" faces Vitamin A deficiency and the new type of millet contains all the nutrients and vitamins in the same amount as the regular millet, except Vitamin A. 2)No other alternative source of Vitamin A in form of vegetables, fruits, etc. exists. 3) New type of millet would be readily accepted by the denizens of Tagus.
Firstly, the conclusion stands on the fact that the residents of Tagus are facing "only" the deficiency of Vitamin A. Also, it considers that most of the residents are facing this problem. Because if only a small portion of the residents are facing the deficiency of Vitamin A, then the huge government funding on subsidizing the crop is not worth the time, money and efforts. Instead the problem could be dealt with alternate Vitamin A supplements orally in the form of artificial medicines. Also, if the government wants to change to the new type of millet they need to consider that the new crop has all the same nutrients and vitamin content except Vitamin A as the original crop. And if that is not the case, the people in the process of dealing with one problem would be infested with some other kind of malnutrition.
Secondly, the government considers that there is no other way to solve the problem of Vitamin A deficiency in the area, and the only way is to make any expensive shift from the ordinary millet to the new Vitamin A enriched millet. It may be possible that there are other sources of Vitamin A in the form of fruits and vegetables which may help to thwart this highly expensive shift. The government can look for alternatives and inform the government about their findings to solve the problem of Vitamin A deficiency.
Thirdly, the argument is based on the fact that the new type of millet would be readily accepted by the residents of the area. It doesn't consider that people who have been eating the same millet for generations together are quite likely to protest the change and sticking to the original millet. The government also fails to consider the fact the impact the irrigation of the new crop will have on the land.
In the end, the government needs to consider a lot of facts and have a sound clarity on the assumptions made to reach a conclusion that would be beneficial both to the government and the residents of the impoverished nation of Tagus. If the government feels that the new millet crop is the only option to deal with the prevalent problem, then they should definitely do everything to promote this new type of millet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Instead,
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Suggestion: A supplement; Supplements
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...cepted by the residents of the area. It doesnt consider that people who have been eati...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'kind of', 'all the same']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.287545787546 0.25644967241 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.122710622711 0.15541462614 79% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0750915750916 0.0836205057962 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0421245421245 0.0520304965353 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0128205128205 0.0272364105082 47% => OK
Prepositions: 0.135531135531 0.125424944231 108% => OK
Participles: 0.029304029304 0.0416121511921 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82768286597 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.032967032967 0.026700313972 123% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.14652014652 0.113004496875 130% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.021978021978 0.0255425247493 86% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00549450549451 0.0127820249294 43% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2890.0 2731.13054187 106% => OK
No of words: 498.0 446.07635468 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.80321285141 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.333333333333 0.378187486979 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253012048193 0.287650121315 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.172690763052 0.208842608468 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122489959839 0.135150697306 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82768286597 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 207.018472906 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.389558232932 0.469332199767 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.9464063693 52.1807786196 84% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 26.2105263158 23.2022227129 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4675955058 57.7814097925 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.105263158 141.986410481 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2105263158 23.2022227129 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.724660767414 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 51.5117311351 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 2.54639175258 1.8405768891 138% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460422189563 0.441005458295 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.173421178661 0.135418324435 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0995875261912 0.0829849096947 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.673533910906 0.58762219726 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.197697433189 0.147661913831 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.232996111042 0.193483328276 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129108981189 0.0970749176394 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.655435158551 0.42659136922 154% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0520568649348 0.0774707102158 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.362633272589 0.312017818177 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137230287663 0.0698173142475 197% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.33743842365 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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