An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
This argument recommends to promote the new type of millet by the goverment of Tagus to fight with the problem of Vitamin A deficiency. The recommendation premised upon the points that this new breed of millet is high in Vitamin A and since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, it will not take much effort to make it popularise among the masses. Also it provides a point that the higher cost of new type of seeds will be compensated in terms of subsidy to farmers. Though as a whole the recommendations seems to be solid, analyzing a little deeper tells us that it is flawed owing to some of the assumption it makes and for which there has been no proper explanations.
First of all, it mentions about the higher cost of the seeds will be compensated by providing subsidy for farming. But it does not give any concrete figure of how higher the cost of seeds will be than the earlier breeds and how much subsidy must be given to compensate that. Because if the cost is much higher than the previous one, then government might not give so much subsidy so as to motivate the farmers to farm the breed. And in case, the amount of subsidy does not compensate the higher cost, farmers will not be interested to opt for this breed. Also, if the cost is much higher, can there be other ways to battle Vitamin A which will be less costlier than the new breed of Millet.
Secondly the recommendation suggest that the staple food is millet. But it fails to suggest some of the statistics. Like how much percentage of the demographic has millet as their primary staple food, and what other foods than millet, come in the preference of the staple food. What is the cost difference of millet and other staple foods in Tagus? What amount of increase in price of Millet will still keep it as the most preferred staple food?
Lastly, recommendation does not provide a strong idea about what can be the disadvantages of using the new breed of Millet. Whether, in the process of enginerring a new breed with higher Vitamin A, it has lost another Vitamin component which was naturally abundant in Millet. Or whether the engineering of new breed has passed all level of examinations and certifications required to be used as a primary staple food?
Unless and untill all these questions are essentially analyzed, the recommendation can not be termed as full-proof. Rather than covering just the holistic aspects of introducing the new breed, the recommendation must consider all the tiny small aspects which can go wrong in the process of promoting the new breed. Since its the matter of health the recommendation must be as objective as it can be.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommends promoting'.
Suggestion: recommends promoting
This argument recommends to promote the new type of millet by the goverment...
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Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...to make it popularise among the masses. Also it provides a point that the higher cos...
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Line 1, column 591, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...per tells us that it is flawed owing to some of the assumption it makes and for which there...
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Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...vernment might not give so much subsidy so as to motivate the farmers to farm the breed....
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Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less costly'?
Suggestion: less costly
... ways to battle Vitamin A which will be less costlier than the new breed of Millet. Secon...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...food is millet. But it fails to suggest some of the statistics. Like how much percentage of...
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Line 8, column 396, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'primary staple food'.
Suggestion: primary staple food
...d certifications required to be used as a primary staple food? Unless and untill all these questio...
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Line 10, column 316, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the process of promoting the new breed. Since its the matter of health the recommenda...
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Line 10, column 322, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ocess of promoting the new breed. Since its the matter of health the recommendation...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'lastly', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'as to', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228628230616 0.25644967241 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.157057654076 0.15541462614 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0914512922465 0.0836205057962 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.051689860835 0.0520304965353 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0278330019881 0.0272364105082 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.145129224652 0.125424944231 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0437375745527 0.0416121511921 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69468420414 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0258449304175 0.026700313972 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.121272365805 0.113004496875 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0318091451292 0.0255425247493 125% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0218687872763 0.0127820249294 171% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2644.0 2731.13054187 97% => OK
No of words: 468.0 446.07635468 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.64957264957 6.12365571057 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.301282051282 0.378187486979 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.202991452991 0.287650121315 71% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126068376068 0.208842608468 60% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0876068376068 0.135150697306 65% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69468420414 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 207.018472906 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433760683761 0.469332199767 92% => OK
Word variations: 48.2686144389 52.1807786196 93% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.4 23.2022227129 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9004555785 57.7814097925 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.2 141.986410481 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 23.2022227129 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.724660767414 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.6991452991 51.9672348444 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.76470588235 1.8405768891 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.464935084164 0.441005458295 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.18282483185 0.135418324435 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0822516575075 0.0829849096947 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.656792843052 0.58762219726 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.087032071162 0.147661913831 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.222830860204 0.193483328276 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100149418005 0.0970749176394 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.481522708877 0.42659136922 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0783634340674 0.0774707102158 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.343438098672 0.312017818177 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973548465338 0.0698173142475 139% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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