An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p

An International development organisation has came up with a new type of breed for millet. This millet is high in vitamin A. The organisation suggest that the government of Tagus should promote this millet in their nation. This will be beneficial for the impoverished population of Tagus who have a high deficiency of Vitamin A. The organisation is asking the government to give subsidy to farmer to encourage the growth of new millet in Tagus. It is very insightful of the organisation to help the Tagus impoverished population by coming up with the this type of millet. But the organisation has made a myriad of assumptions which need to be cleared.
Firstly, Organisation has introduced a new type of seed of millet which is rich in Vitamin A for the population of Tagus. But they have not mentioned is there any possibility of having any kind of adverse effect on population consuming it. They have failed to mention that is there any other nutrient been compromised for increasing Vitamin A in the seed. There is a possibility that population of Tagus recover from the deficiency of Vitamin A but are attacked by the any other deficiency. In this case these millet will not be beneficial for the people. So proper research should be done for checking the levels of all nutrients and minerals.

Secondly, Organisation states that the new seed of millet is costlier. Since the seeds are costlier it will increase the cost of buying the new millet. Will the population of Tagus buy such a costly grain? Organisation should give some information about the increasing price and make sure whether the population are eager to buy costly grain or not. Organisation states that a subsidy will be given by government to encourage farming of new seed. But failed to mention the amount of burden it will cost to the nation and government of Tagus are ready to take up the burden or not. So Organisation should mention all such information.And Organisation should suggest some ideas for promoting this new type of millet.

Thus, Organisation should clear all such assumptions before giving any kind of recommendation. They need to do proper research related to the level of all kinds of nutrients and minerals. They need to consider the cost of the new millet. And also give some suggest related to promotion of new type of millet. This new millet can be beneficial to the population of Tagus is all the aspects are considered.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'come'.
Suggestion: come
...ernational development organisation has came up with a new type of breed for millet....
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Line 1, column 548, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...poverished population by coming up with the this type of millet. But the organisation ha...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...assumptions which need to be cleared. Firstly, Organisation has introduced a n...
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Line 2, column 468, Rule ID: A_BUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a bit'?
Suggestion: A bit
... recover from the deficiency of Vitamin A but are attacked by the any other deficienc...
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Line 2, column 529, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this millet' or 'these millets'?
Suggestion: this millet; these millets
... the any other deficiency. In this case these millet will not be beneficial for the people. ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...levels of all nutrients and minerals. Secondly, Organi...
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Line 4, column 96, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hat the new seed of millet is costlier. Since the seeds are costlier it will increase...
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Line 4, column 658, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...ion should mention all such information.And Organisation should suggest some ideas ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for promoting this new type of millet. Thus, Organisation ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'as for', 'kind of', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251131221719 0.25644967241 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.176470588235 0.15541462614 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0837104072398 0.0836205057962 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.027149321267 0.0520304965353 52% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0203619909502 0.0272364105082 75% => OK
Prepositions: 0.131221719457 0.125424944231 105% => OK
Participles: 0.052036199095 0.0416121511921 125% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92670405576 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0361990950226 0.026700313972 136% => OK
Particles: 0.00678733031674 0.001811407834 375% => OK
Determiners: 0.135746606335 0.113004496875 120% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0294117647059 0.0255425247493 115% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00678733031674 0.0127820249294 53% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2513.0 2731.13054187 92% => OK
No of words: 414.0 446.07635468 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07004830918 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.330917874396 0.378187486979 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.236714975845 0.287650121315 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166666666667 0.208842608468 80% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142512077295 0.135150697306 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92670405576 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 207.018472906 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.367149758454 0.469332199767 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 39.1748316419 52.1807786196 75% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 16.56 23.2022227129 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4446409715 57.7814097925 49% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.52 141.986410481 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.56 23.2022227129 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.44 0.724660767414 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 40.2314975845 51.9672348444 77% => OK
Elegance: 1.93939393939 1.8405768891 105% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.514324257182 0.441005458295 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.168972998803 0.135418324435 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0975851858128 0.0829849096947 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.529169623786 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.12403962044 0.147661913831 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.223585504194 0.193483328276 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0995145522578 0.0970749176394 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.542138143828 0.42659136922 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0450566509825 0.0774707102158 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.392511109701 0.312017818177 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903304077244 0.0698173142475 129% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.33743842365 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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