An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The above argument states that in response to the deficiency of Vitamin A in the impoverished nation of Tagus, a new breed of millet has been designed by an international development organization. The cost of this millet will be higher and the farmers are to be provided subsidy for growing them. The argument is talking about a very expensive venture which would be difficult for the impoverished nation like Tagus and hence is not a good idea at this stage.There are several obstacles in the path of success of this argument. All of them has to be dealt with in order to achieve the desired result.
Firstly, the argument itself is describing Tagus as a poor nation. the cost of this genetically engineered millet is higher and hence there is a good chance that a large part of the population may not be able to afford it. In such situation, the problem would remain the same. Yes, there may be a few people get benefited by this change but the majority would remain unattended. even providing subsidy to the farmers would be a great challenge for a nation which is already poor.
Secondly, the argument is unable to provide enough evidence of the efficiency of this new breed in curing the Vitamin A deficiency. If the said breed is only able to make small changes, it is totally not worth all such efforts. It is very important to observe the extent of results this engineered millet can promise before making any decisions of executing the proposal.The country of Tagus, already being poor cannot afford to experiment when so much money is involved.
At last, there is no mention of the farming methods of this new breed. It is possible that this breed may require more water for irrigation. If there is no proper facility for this, the idea would be a complete fiasco both for government and the farmers. Also, the type of fertilizers required is not not provided in the argument. It is possible that this breed requires some artificial fertilizers which can pollute the environment of Tagus and then, instead of getting desired results, the people of the nation would be facing a totally new and severe problem. It is essential for the organization to provide all such details. Without them, it would be imprudent to make any recommendations for this proposal.
In conclusion, it can only be said that the argument, though alluring, is unable to provide necessary details regarding the efficacy of the new breed, requirements related to its cultivation and its impact on the environment.A complete study and report on the above mentioned issue is required. Without any such information, it would not be wise to recommend the proposal as the chances of getting desired results are dubious at the moment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'as to', 'in conclusion', 'talking about']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213438735178 0.25644967241 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.162055335968 0.15541462614 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.104743083004 0.0836205057962 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0474308300395 0.0520304965353 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0296442687747 0.0272364105082 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122529644269 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0494071146245 0.0416121511921 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75798412797 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0296442687747 0.026700313972 111% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.144268774704 0.113004496875 128% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0316205533597 0.0255425247493 124% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00790513833992 0.0127820249294 62% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2717.0 2731.13054187 99% => OK
No of words: 466.0 446.07635468 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.830472103 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.351931330472 0.378187486979 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.268240343348 0.287650121315 93% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.171673819742 0.208842608468 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115879828326 0.135150697306 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75798412797 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 207.018472906 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463519313305 0.469332199767 99% => OK
Word variations: 52.1087072879 52.1807786196 100% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.039408867 105% => OK
Sentence length: 22.1904761905 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8187998361 57.7814097925 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.380952381 141.986410481 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1904761905 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 0.724660767414 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.0145105252 51.9672348444 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.61157024793 1.8405768891 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433090704871 0.441005458295 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0977655102618 0.135418324435 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.046601523385 0.0829849096947 56% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.574149906227 0.58762219726 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136330516735 0.147661913831 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182883810851 0.193483328276 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123000522808 0.0970749176394 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.521779979334 0.42659136922 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0362185517271 0.0774707102158 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313629311664 0.312017818177 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122124769855 0.0698173142475 175% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.87684729064 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 53.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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