In this recommendation, an international development organization has helped engineer a millet that can possibly solve the vitamin A deficiency amongst the impoverished people of Tagus, and it is pertinent that the government of Tagus take upon the task to promote the consumption of this new kind of millet to combat the vitamin A deficenecy. This recommendation is most likely a proposal pitched by a non governmental humanitarian organisation, interested in seeing improvement and change in the impoverished state of the people in Tagus. Though the proposal presents a noble idea and cause, there are many idealistic and unsupported assumptions made that undermine its feasibility.
Firstly, the recommendation states that the new breed of millet is high in vitamin A, hence it would solve vitamin A deficiency among people in Tagus. However, no tests or data is provided to prove that this new millet indeed would help in vitamin A deficiency. It simply assumes that vitamin A in this new millet species high in vitamin A would be absorbed and solve this problem effectively. Were human trials done to prove this? If the effect of the new millet is unknown, it cannot guarantee that the recommendation would eradicate the problem of vitamin A deficiency in Tagus.
Furthermore, the recommendation suggests that the government support this program by providing subsidies to farmers because seeds for this new type of millet would cost more. However, it fails to state how much subsidies. Will these subsidies enough to cover the increased cost of millet? If not, it seems improbable that farmers will be compelled to take on these millet, given their already impoverished circumstances. Even if they do, they would have to increase the price of selling this type of millet to the public. Given the choice of a more expensive and ordinarily prices millet, it is unlikely that the poorest of the poor in Tagus would consume the new engineered millet. This would defeat the whole purpose in helping the most impoverished in Tagus to eradicate their vitamin A deficiency.
Last but not the least, the last sentence in this recommendation brings about many debatable points. It states that to combat vitamin A deficiency 'the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet'. Is promoting this new millet the only way to fight vitamin A deficiency? Most importantly, should the government of Tagus do everything it can and prioritize this over other national concerns, such as economy and security? Are the other issues less important? In fact the problem of vitamin A deficiency stems from an impoverished populace. It is more pertinent that the economy be looked closely upon to lift the nation from poverty.
It undeniable that the recommendation was made out of goodwill with the well-intended goal of pulling the poverty-stricken populace from malnourishment. Nevertheless, it is unlikely the proposal will produce its intended effects if many of the pertinent questions with regards to feasibility are unanswered. To strengthen the recommendation, concrete and detailed plans regarding government budget and subsidies have to be put out. Furthermore, considering Tagus’ impoverished state, a multi-pronged approach with complementary policies can be considered to improve the well-being of the populace. Most importantly, more studies have to be done to prove that the millet indeed can help in solving vitamin A deficiency. With all these additional insights and careful thought, it will be no doubt a feasible and scrupulous proposal can be effected successfully.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...ation has helped engineer a millet that can possibly solve the vitamin A deficiency amongst ...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...st more. However, it fails to state how much subsidies. Will these subsidies enough ...
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Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this millet' or 'these millets'?
Suggestion: this millet; these millets
...at farmers will be compelled to take on these millet, given their already impoverished circu...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'nevertheless', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'no doubt', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236133122029 0.25644967241 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.153724247227 0.15541462614 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10618066561 0.0836205057962 127% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0396196513471 0.0520304965353 76% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0316957210777 0.0272364105082 116% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120443740095 0.125424944231 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0443740095087 0.0416121511921 107% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.1917787791 2.79052419416 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0332805071315 0.026700313972 125% => OK
Particles: 0.00158478605388 0.001811407834 87% => OK
Determiners: 0.128367670365 0.113004496875 114% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0332805071315 0.0255425247493 130% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00316957210777 0.0127820249294 25% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3615.0 2731.13054187 132% => OK
No of words: 576.0 446.07635468 129% => OK
Chars per words: 6.27604166667 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.57801047555 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.387152777778 0.378187486979 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.307291666667 0.287650121315 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21875 0.208842608468 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.164930555556 0.135150697306 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1917787791 2.79052419416 114% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 207.018472906 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435763888889 0.469332199767 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.7494723335 52.1807786196 99% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.039408867 140% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5714285714 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1990777681 57.7814097925 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.107142857 141.986410481 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 23.2022227129 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.607142857143 0.724660767414 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 51.3005952381 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.78169014085 1.8405768891 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.530940658251 0.441005458295 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.120466503851 0.135418324435 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0736203351082 0.0829849096947 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.519075394859 0.58762219726 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.149434871385 0.147661913831 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.19832474273 0.193483328276 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126719960382 0.0970749176394 131% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.538624539605 0.42659136922 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0280712026916 0.0774707102158 36% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.387981959162 0.312017818177 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844748716215 0.0698173142475 121% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 8.33743842365 240% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 6.46551724138 201% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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