Since its opening in Collegeville twenty years ago, Monarch Books has developed a large customer base due to its reader-friendly atmosphere and wide selection of books on all subjects. Last month, Book and Bean, a combination bookstore and coffee shop, announced its intention to open a Collegeville store. Monarch Books should open its own in-store café in the space currently devoted to children's books. Given recent national census data indicating a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten, sales of children's books are likely to decline. By replacing its children's books section with a café, Monarch Books can increase profits and ward off competition from Book and Bean
The argument concludes that by changing the children’s book section to a cafe, sales of the monarch books can be increased than before. Proclaimed this way the argument fails to acknowledge several key factors and manipulated facts by which it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument depend on assumptions for which there is not clear evidence. However, the evidence stated in the argument reveals little credible support for the argument. Therefore the argument is weak and unconvincing.
Initially, the argument assumes that replacing the children’s book space with a cafe might increase the revenue. This is an assumption by replacing the children’s section the sales might go low, because the book store is well known for it’s reader friendly atmosphere there is a possibility that it can get disturbed due to the cafe. Argument would have been convincing if it was explicitly stated that how can the sales of the store increase by opening a cafe. In this digital world very few are left with the habit of going to store to read a book, this is a major factor to deal with in order to increase the revenue.
Secondly, the argument readily claims that sales of the children’s books are likely to decline. since, there is a decrease in the percentage of the population under age ten. This statement is again weak and do not have a strong evidence to stand on. The argument fails to explain the correlation between sales of the children’s books and the decline in the population. How can the decline in the population of the children can affect the sales?. If the argument was provided with evidence supporting his claim then he would have sounded better for the readers.
Finally, the argument claims that by replacing its children's books section with a cafe, Monarch Books can increase profits . This is a weak conclusion which do not have a evidence to defend.
However, the evidence stated in the argument reveals little credible support but it raises many questions that, how can the store make profits by replacing children's books section with a cafe?
Without giving a convincing answers for these questions one is left with an opinion that the authors claim is wishful rather than a substantial evidence.
In sum, the argument is weak, unconvincing and have no legs to stand on. If the argument was provided with clear evidence then it could have been more convincing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0396039604 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82680573546 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425742574257 0.468620217663 91% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.471057884232 425% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9467845578 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9523809524 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2380952381 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116943221814 0.218282227539 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419306928789 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595607142416 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0679947261477 0.128457276422 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537602126458 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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