Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Launching a new branch of health-related products in the town of Plainsville is not necessarily persuade readers to accept that this franchise will be very successful in selling because the residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lifestyle. The author integrated this assumption with highly demand of citizens for using exercise shoes and clothes, the situation of fitness club in town and the program called “fitness for life” in children’s school. Conversely, none of these claims led to support the assumptions.
First, there is no relationship between the use of exercise shoes and health rate in the town. Maybe citizens prefer to wear comfortable shoes and use exercise clothes because their lifestyle is established this way, this not make sense they are fallowing healthy lifestyle or they want to keep in fit by eating healthy food or they are already in appropriate shape and don not need diet. Second, if they are enthusiastic to custom exercise products in order to do exercises there is no guarantee this passion of selling constantly increase or continue.
Third, number of people who are attending sport club is increased to compare last years and all fitness classes are full, do not support the idea that the citizens toward health. It is possible, the fee of clubs reduced or the poor equipment were changed to new and modern which make residents to join local club after years. Maybe the manager of club changed everything to improve the quality of the local club.
Finally, children who participated in “fitness for life” program does not amplify the recommendation that they will buy food from Natura’s way store. They exercise a lot at school or different sport camp and they keep in health without diet.
The author’s recommendation is not complete supported according to some mentioned assumptions. For integrated recommendations and assumptions, author needs to do survey and gather more information from residents to find persuasive reason between healthy lifestyle and increasing the benefit of store’s customers.
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... claims led to support the assumptions. First, there is no relationship between ...
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... the benefit of store's customers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, finally, first, if, may, second, so, third, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 329.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37993920973 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04315587252 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553191489362 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0856598895 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.153846154 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167962090681 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579306293019 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569612051681 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095350535881 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601261272913 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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