Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
There are few assumptions and gaps in the information which are needed to be addressed in order to depict a viable picture that will hold the state of Madagascan shrimps in the told area.
First, it is not clear nor does it is mentioned in passage if that the given location is the only place that inhibits the Madagscan shrimp. If it is not the only habitat for them, there is possibility that they may be able to perseve their toatal population as a specie even if they will be wiped of the area by the unfortunate circumstances described by the aggressive fishing at the location which is discussed in the passage. So it should be clarified that what fraction of Madagascan shrimp is located in this habitat.
Important issue that weakens the claims in the passage is that quantification of its data is missing. With the absent of real numbers it is impossible to tell what is the accurate state of the Madagascan shrimps. This could be fixed by giving the shrimp population before the incursions and after and the rate of reproduction. Such data will enable to develop a mathemtical model that will show the trends of the shrimps population. Such model may or may not been made already by the author. We are not given the quntifiable information that is obligatory to make predictions about the shrimps population
Another issue is the rate of reproduction of the specie. We should have an information that shows how much reproduction is actually happening and to what degree the shrimps reproduce and what fraction is it. Mathematically there is a viable possibility that the shrimps popuation will approach some maintainable limit and so they will be able to survive the fishing routine. We should be supplied with all the necessary facts in order to be able to predict the future line of the population of Madagscan shrimps.
Additional concern is that the trend might change if the reality changes. For example if there are a small population, the fisherman might be able to grasp this situation and the risk for their future source of living and try to fish in more abundant areas in order to perserve the shrimps population. In fact, there are many others parameters that may cause the current trend to diverge into a different course. Another one, for example, is a state law that will prohibit fishing after a certain amount.
To conclude, there needed to be clarifications from the author and the author should address all the points we discussed here, in order to have a viable conclusion about the state of Madagascan shrimp.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
... First, it is not clear nor does it is mentioned in passage if that the given ...
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Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: be
... First, it is not clear nor does it is mentioned in passage if that the given ...
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Line 5, column 415, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shrimps'' or 'shrimp's'?
Suggestion: shrimps'; shrimp's
... model that will show the trends of the shrimps population. Such model may or may not b...
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Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hould have an information that shows how much reproduction is actually happening ...
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Line 9, column 283, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'shrimps'' or 'shrimp's'?
Suggestion: shrimps'; shrimp's
...abundant areas in order to perserve the shrimps population. In fact, there are many oth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, if, may, so, for example, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82232346241 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76082380447 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446469248292 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9267452169 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.611111111 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3888888889 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.77777777778 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167325603576 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562332200241 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426144168226 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934202343375 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238428816108 0.0628817314937 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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