To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
Buckingham College is planning to build new dormitories for accommodating newly enrolled students. Considering the current trend of enrollment and rising prices of off-campus housing, the author finds this solution apt. But this argument does not make a cogent case for building dormitories. It is easy to comprehend the need of dormitories based on rising enrollment but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to support the need of building new housing for students.
Citing evidence of growth in enrollment of students, the author reports that the Buckingham's enrollment will double every 50 years and the current dormitory space will not be sufficient for accommodation. However, the scope and validity of evidence is not clear. The evidence does not provide details about the students who are in need of on campus housing. Author blindly assumes that all the newly enrolled students will be in need of housing. Unless this assumption is supported by strong, valid evidence and details about admission, it cannot buttress the author's argument.
Additionally, the author states that the average rent for off campus housing has increased in recent year. Author completely fails to mention the details underlying this assumption. Evidence posited by author does not include the cost of housing for different areas nearby Buckingham college. There might be a situation where the cost of housing is stable near campus but increasing rapidly in far off regions, leading to increase in average rent for apartments. Author should provide details about the cost for different regions and based on these details, he should draw any conclusion.
Finally, author gives a lot of importance to newly constructed dormitories in attracting new enrollments. Author fails to grasp other important criterion like courses, faculties, rankings, etc. which are essential in selecting a college. Infrastructure plays important role while enrollment procedure but other factors are also very important.
College should gather more evidence to support the need of new dormitories. They should carefully look out for the percentage of students who are opting for on campus housing. College should focus more on the areas of interest while calculating the average rent rather than focusing on general data. College administration should focus on other factors to attract new admissions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 561, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...about admission, it cannot buttress the authors argument. Additionally, the author s...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'thus', 'while']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.282926829268 0.25644967241 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.160975609756 0.15541462614 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0780487804878 0.0836205057962 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0609756097561 0.0520304965353 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00975609756098 0.0272364105082 36% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136585365854 0.125424944231 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0560975609756 0.0416121511921 135% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84803055155 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0219512195122 0.026700313972 82% => OK
Particles: 0.00487804878049 0.001811407834 269% => OK
Determiners: 0.0829268292683 0.113004496875 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0268292682927 0.0255425247493 105% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00975609756098 0.0127820249294 76% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2410.0 2731.13054187 88% => OK
No of words: 373.0 446.07635468 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.46112600536 6.12365571057 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.44235924933 0.378187486979 117% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.340482573727 0.287650121315 118% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.243967828418 0.208842608468 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.155495978552 0.135150697306 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84803055155 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 207.018472906 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501340482574 0.469332199767 107% => OK
Word variations: 53.6907704661 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 16.9545454545 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6363884478 57.7814097925 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.545454545 141.986410481 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9545454545 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.409090909091 0.724660767414 56% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 51.0028028272 51.9672348444 98% => OK
Elegance: 2.05263157895 1.8405768891 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41753289363 0.441005458295 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.102341116333 0.135418324435 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0842433608104 0.0829849096947 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.526203132893 0.58762219726 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.117584402907 0.147661913831 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147528964248 0.193483328276 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894949584127 0.0970749176394 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.275872235468 0.42659136922 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.150148087204 0.0774707102158 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255407145049 0.312017818177 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100901003386 0.0698173142475 145% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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