Slimville city residents have adopted healthier lifestyles. A recent survey of city residents shows that their exercise habits confirms more closely to what doctors and health practitioners recommend than they did seven years ago. During those seven years, more people have been taking daily walks than ever before. Although a few gymnasium complex in city have been closed down, the other sport complex and gymnasiums see full attendances in some seasons. Because of these positive changes in the exercising habits of slimville city residents, we predict that obesity rate of the city will soon be below the national average.
The author strongly asserts that the obesity rate is lowered in Slimville city. The author of this analytical piece had drawn an optimistic conclusion from disjoint and incomplete data, that obesity rate of city will soon be below the national average.
He begins with a broad statement based on survey analysis of exercise habits recommended by doctors and health practitioners. The survey shows that citizens of Slimville closely follow the exercise routine recommended. This leaves a lot of space for doubt. As the survey was done seven years ago, it raises a reservation about survey. Other questions can also be raised on the basis of survey such as who were the doctors and health practitioners panel for survey and what were their area of expertise. A similar question about the potential difference in population of city seven years ago and at present should also be taken into account before drawing the conclusion. The survey also shows a higher proportion of health walkers. We cannot jump to the conclusion based on this incomplete data.
Other assertion made by writer is regarding the attendance of gymnasium complex. The writer stresses on the attendance of the gymnasium complexes. Thus he summarizes that residents of Slimville are practicing healthier lifestyle. The piece of writer assertion mentions about close down of some gym complex from which it can be cited that due to reduce in number of gym complexes majority of citizens must have join the other complex resulting in overcrowded of gyms. Thus it implies that number of people exercising has
decreased.
The given information cannot be interpreted to mean that there are positive changes in exercising habits of citizens. It cannot necessarily means that the obesity rate of citizens of Slimville will reduce. Unless there is a record of how obese Slimville residents were seven years ago and present times, we it can’t inferred from such restricted information whether people of Slimville are practicing a healthier lifestyle or not.
In general, it may be said that writer has failed to make a convincing argument because of complete absence of statistical data. The argument ends with an unjustified optimistic conclusion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, regarding, so, thus, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 357.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23529411765 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80282301199 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521008403361 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7426228303 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.45 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.85 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263830181981 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690672963549 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680365476107 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109681568138 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102011897587 0.0628817314937 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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