The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit.”
Argument Analysis.
The author mentions that the smith corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now a part of youngtown wildlife preserve. This could be the best way to preserve the 300 bird species but it is not totally true that building a small hotel would harm the large wildlife preserve. Since it is mentioned that the smith corporation wants to build a small hotel in the land and they have promised to ensure preservation, the term 'disastrous consequences' is bit of a exaggeration.
The author has also mentioned a wrong reasoning in the petition. It is said that tourists visit a lot to see the magnificent bird population, so building a hotel right near it might promote more tourists to visit the preserve, which will indirectly benefit the community which relies on tourists who visit the sanctuary. The author has not mentioned the total area of the preserve and the area acquired for the hotel to be built. This would have given us a better idea to judge whether building the hotel might have affected the bird species. More information like whether the land acquired is by cutting down trees or is made on an open area of free land would have better helped in deciding the fate of the birds living there. Thus more proper reasoning and conclusive evidence is needed rather than assumptions to decide whether the written petition is justified by the environmental protection group.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: bitten
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221343873518 0.25644967241 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.217391304348 0.15541462614 140% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0869565217391 0.0836205057962 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0434782608696 0.0520304965353 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0237154150198 0.0272364105082 87% => OK
Prepositions: 0.098814229249 0.125424944231 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0790513833992 0.0416121511921 190% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.67494897305 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0355731225296 0.026700313972 133% => OK
Particles: 0.00395256916996 0.001811407834 218% => OK
Determiners: 0.150197628458 0.113004496875 133% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0316205533597 0.0255425247493 124% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0158102766798 0.0127820249294 124% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1403.0 2731.13054187 51% => OK
No of words: 241.0 446.07635468 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.82157676349 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.57801047555 86% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.307053941909 0.378187486979 81% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.236514522822 0.287650121315 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.195020746888 0.208842608468 93% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116182572614 0.135150697306 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67494897305 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 207.018472906 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53112033195 0.469332199767 113% => OK
Word variations: 50.2345110609 52.1807786196 96% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 20.039408867 45% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 26.7777777778 23.2022227129 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0704167668 57.7814097925 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.888888889 141.986410481 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7777777778 23.2022227129 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.724660767414 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 5.14285714286 39% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 50.4292300599 51.9672348444 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.40277777778 1.8405768891 76% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.70622023774 0.441005458295 160% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.174494920498 0.135418324435 129% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0628080362756 0.0829849096947 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.642721844709 0.58762219726 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0940571140336 0.147661913831 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.393679760249 0.193483328276 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156841408163 0.0970749176394 162% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.591993967297 0.42659136922 139% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0 0.0774707102158 0% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.645751490582 0.312017818177 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0869514081586 0.0698173142475 125% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 14.657635468 55% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 41.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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