Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior
No one has any doubt about the influance of media in our daily life. Most of the people around the world get the news, know the weather predication and even get entertainments from media. The question that poses itself: Does media has negative effects especially on children?. In my point of view, media is the reason of increasing the violence level in our society by the program it presents.
First of all, recently, children tend to be more aggressive and some of them try to do something dangerous and harmful. When you ask any child “why did you do that?”, you will suppose that you you will get the answer that he or she was trying to mimic one of the characters in one of the cartoon programs. Cartoon programs tend to be more aggressive than before. Most of them contain scenes of wars or crimes and we all know that children ,in the first period of their life, always try to learn from what they hear and see. For example; my cousine hurt himself when he was trying to do what the “hero” in one of the cartoon programs did.
Furthermore, media has a lot of effect when wars start between countries. It maybe the main reason of the war by spreading false news. A lot of unofficial reports say that the most famous media channels belong to families that try to take control of the word. For instance; if one of news channel says that the weather will be extremely bad and heavy raining, you will notice that most of people stay at home. This is just a simple example. Just try to imagine how bad it will be to spread incorrect information when two countries are in conflict. Moreover, recently most of the news are about wars and crimes and that surely will have negative consequences on the audience and make them more aggressive.
Finally, parents have the main control of their children. They can observe what they watch and prevent them from watching bad programs. They are the main teacher for their children. As we mentioned, media spreads various programs so that the more careful parents about what their children watch, the more they control their children’s behaviors. They have to create balance to raise their children in a good way.
In sum, all parents should be careful about what their children watch. Media has a huge impact on its audience either negative or positive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 232, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: have
... question that poses itself: Does media has negative effects especially on children...
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Line 3, column 200, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: you
...u do that?', you will suppose that you you will get the answer that he or she was ...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... or crimes and we all know that children ,in the first period of their life, alway...
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Line 5, column 382, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...and heavy raining, you will notice that most of people stay at home. This is just a simple exa...
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224839400428 0.25644967241 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.147751605996 0.15541462614 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0706638115632 0.0836205057962 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0428265524625 0.0520304965353 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0813704496788 0.0272364105082 299% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.122055674518 0.125424944231 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0128479657388 0.0416121511921 31% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.51049649343 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0256959314775 0.026700313972 96% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0899357601713 0.113004496875 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.017130620985 0.0255425247493 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0278372591006 0.0127820249294 218% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2328.0 2731.13054187 85% => OK
No of words: 409.0 446.07635468 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.69193154034 6.12365571057 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.293398533007 0.378187486979 78% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.227383863081 0.287650121315 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.149144254279 0.208842608468 71% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0904645476773 0.135150697306 67% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51049649343 2.79052419416 90% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 207.018472906 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488997555012 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 53.5025139992 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 17.7826086957 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.518329363 57.7814097925 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.217391304 141.986410481 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7826086957 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.434782608696 0.724660767414 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 40.5209950037 51.9672348444 78% => OK
Elegance: 1.32283464567 1.8405768891 72% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383222925856 0.441005458295 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0887436771383 0.135418324435 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0602470365722 0.0829849096947 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514430160474 0.58762219726 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150176430057 0.147661913831 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130787277574 0.193483328276 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742572887693 0.0970749176394 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.304454706345 0.42659136922 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.109104458685 0.0774707102158 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233285896714 0.312017818177 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834751370577 0.0698173142475 120% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.87684729064 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 1.0 6.46551724138 15% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 4.0 14.657635468 27% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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