IN SURVEYS MASON CITY RESIDENTS RANK WATER SPORTS(SWIMMING, BOATING AND FISHING ) AMONG THEIR FAVOURITE RECREATIONAL ACTS.
THE MASON RIVER FLOWING THROUGH THE CITIES IS RARELY USED FOR THESES PURSUITS, HOWEVER, AND THE CITY PARK DEPARTMENT DEVOTES
LITTLE OF ITS BUDGET TO MAINTAINING RIVERSIDES RECREATIONAL FACILITES. FOR YEARS THERE HAVE BEEN COMPLAINTS FROM THE RESIDENTS
ABOUT THE QUALITY OF RIVERS' WATER AND THE RIVER'S SMELL . IN RESPONSE , THE STATE HAS RECENTLY ANNOUNCED PLANS TO CLEAN UP MASON
RIVER. USE OF THE RIVER FOR WATER SPORTS IS, THEREFORE , SURE TO INCREASE. THE CITY GOVERNMENT SHOUILD FOR THAT REASON DEVOTE
MORE MONEY IN THIS YEAR'S BUDGET OF RIVERSIDE RECREATIONAL FACILITES.
While, the state may announce to clean the mason river, clean the water and make it free from smell. It is still unclear
to assume that it will surely increase the water sports activites. The auther's claim that the government should allocate
resource for water sports activities which will be succeful recreational activity in the city is filled with incomplete
premises, evidences with flawed assumptions and wrong considerations.
The main basis for the auther's claims seems to be the survey report. The survey in itself is a different subject and
requires close examination. It is too premature to put the results of survey directly into action without proper scrutinization.
Survey results may depend on various factors such as the questions in the survey, the length of quotianaires, the behaviour
of the people towards the question. For instance, the survey may have contained only two questions whether they liked water
sports or computer games or the sample size may have not been the full representation of the city. For any of the resons the
survey may not be valid. The auther must have infact conducted a detailed process , interviewed various persons from
different backgrounds , field of interests and had contained a variety of options to choose from and then if the water sports
came first the claims would have been valid.
Apart from the survey, one other major defects of the claim seems to be assuming that cleaning the river and making it free
from smells would increase people's interest but, there is no mention of what was the main reason for the offensive smell
in the water. If it was from the industrial waste and dumping; yes the water can be made free of the offesive odours but what
if the smell is natural due the algaes underwater or due to sulphurs or any other natural gases present underneath.In such
cases, no efforts would be fruitful to remove the smell and thus the hope of any water sports event be long-gone. But again,
if the auther had dig up upon the source of pollution and smell and found that it is something curuable the claim would
have been justified.
Deeming, the above mentioned fallacies of survey and odourus smell can somehow be amended: One ther big and major
drawback of the authers' calim lie in considering that the allocation of resources on water sports will surely be proven
beneficial. There is no mention of how much budget is available for the government and what are the priorites and aims.
If the city is lacking in education and health facilities , would it be reasonable to budgeting in recreational activiteis
while the city suffer from diseases and illeteracy. Again, what of the proirities? Every government has some target to
reach and needs backup fund, if the fund is provided to the water activites and does not succed in getting enough profits.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'apart from', 'for instance', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.264077669903 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.155339805825 0.15541462614 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0912621359223 0.0836205057962 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.031067961165 0.0520304965353 60% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0194174757282 0.0272364105082 71% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116504854369 0.125424944231 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0427184466019 0.0416121511921 103% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.61206862433 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.021359223301 0.026700313972 80% => OK
Particles: 0.00194174757282 0.001811407834 107% => OK
Determiners: 0.12427184466 0.113004496875 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0330097087379 0.0255425247493 129% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0116504854369 0.0127820249294 91% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2854.0 2731.13054187 104% => OK
No of words: 482.0 446.07635468 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.92116182573 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.348547717842 0.378187486979 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.230290456432 0.287650121315 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.163900414938 0.208842608468 78% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.112033195021 0.135150697306 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61206862433 2.79052419416 94% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 207.018472906 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495850622407 0.469332199767 106% => OK
Word variations: 57.4428092899 52.1807786196 110% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 26.7777777778 23.2022227129 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.8156939804 57.7814097925 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.555555556 141.986410481 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7777777778 23.2022227129 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 24.0 5.14285714286 467% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 15.0 3.58251231527 419% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.8068234209 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 2.05660377358 1.8405768891 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419795478938 0.441005458295 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.147791633633 0.135418324435 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0796736831088 0.0829849096947 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.764582208741 0.58762219726 130% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.263622863188 0.147661913831 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.213077812526 0.193483328276 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515264546507 0.0970749176394 53% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.17811255005 0.42659136922 42% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0979090252315 0.0774707102158 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18742719015 0.312017818177 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651638682843 0.0698173142475 93% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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