The vice president for human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet inappropriately from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. Installing software on company computers to detect employees' Internet use is the best way to prevent employees from wasting time on the job. It will foster a better work ethic at Climpson and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The vice president of the Climpson industries suggested that tracking employees' internet usage and punishing them accordingly would foster a better work ethic, which inherently improves the industries overall profits. However, this recommendation is not completely legible, and would require further explanation.
For instance, he stated that monitoring employees would lead to a decline in the number of hours spent for personal purposes and would therefore increase the profits, but, this statement is not complete. Adding a point where in the statistics of the company is displayed, showing that the months where employees used their office hours effectively led to a profit and vice versa, would surely strengthen the argument.
Another such example is where he states, there will be a reduction of wastage of time, if employees who are found to use the internet inappropriately are punished. This assumes the fact that once the employees are punished,
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ct that once the employees are punished,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, if, so, then, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 55.5748502994 18% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 815.0 2260.96107784 36% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 148.0 441.139720559 34% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50675675676 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.48791127476 4.56307096286 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91161341792 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 204.123752495 47% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648648648649 0.468620217663 138% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 705.55239521 35% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1730241928 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.833333333 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.70786347227 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170495846109 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790008400178 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038595924978 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111701747623 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210246712236 0.0628817314937 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.32208582834 123% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 98.500998004 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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