"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that opening cafe at Monarch Book will attract more customers, rendering its main conclusion that it will compete with their counterpart Regal Books.
The argument fails to provide any justification that the location in which Monarch Book is situated has people which prefer going to cafe. If the people of that location do not prefer to go to cafe than it will be of no use of Monarch Book to open cafe. Moreover, usually people go to cafe for having some good time with their friends. It is not necessary for the people who visit to cafe will be interested in buying any books from Monarch Book.
The argument would have been stronger had it provided information regarding the people who visits to cafe on often basis. Even then, the argument would have to further prove that, the people who visits to cafe will be buying books also.
The argument also leaves many unanswered questions. Even if the population of children is less, it does not means that population of children in the particular region where Monarch Book is situated is also having less children’s. In fact if the major customer of Monarch Book would be children’s than by removing the children’s section would reduce the number of customer visiting. Nonetheless, argument assumes that because there is a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten it will also result in low selling of their books.
The argument would have been stronger had it provided information regarding the sales of books according to age wise. This would imply that which section of books, they can discontinue.
Finally, the argument claims without warrant that opening a cafe will increase the customer base further. The argument is based on the assumption that Regal Book will be having an increase in customer base. But there is no proof about how the Regal Book is performing after opening the cafe as well as before when there was no cafe because Regal Book has opened the cafe recently.
Even if the Regal Book is performing well it is not enough to assume that Monarch Book will also perform better. There are many important questions which need to be answered like, Are the customers of Regal Book and Monarch Book having same distribution according to age? If Regal Book is having more customer of age less than ten after opening cafe then it will surely not helpful for Monarch. Similarly, Is the Location of Regal Book and Monarch Book is same? Because to assume an increase in customers at Regal Book after opening cafe does not implies Monarch Book will also have an increase in customer if both the stores are at different Locations.
Suppose Monarch Book is situated near a School whereas Regal Book is situated near a college. In this case Regal Book might see increase in customer by opening a cafe but on the other hand Monarch Book will see a decline in numbers of customers after discontinuing the children's book section.
Because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons....
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... has people which prefer going to cafe. If the people of that location do not pref...
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...who visits to cafe will be buying books also. The argument also leaves many unans...
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Message: Did you mean 'mean'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: mean
...lation of children is less, it does not means that population of children in the part...
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Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mean'
Suggestion: mean
...lation of children is less, it does not means that population of children in the part...
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Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...l Book has opened the cafe recently. Even if the Regal Book is performing well it is...
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...uestions which need to be answered like, Are the customers of Regal Book and Mona...
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Line 13, column 549, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'imply'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: imply
... Regal Book after opening cafe does not implies Monarch Book will also have an increase...
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Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'imply'
Suggestion: imply
... Regal Book after opening cafe does not implies Monarch Book will also have an increase...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'if', 'moreover', 'nonetheless', 'regarding', 'similarly', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'whereas', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'as well as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.279264214047 0.25644967241 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.19397993311 0.15541462614 125% => OK
Adjectives: 0.056856187291 0.0836205057962 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0518394648829 0.0520304965353 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0250836120401 0.0272364105082 92% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128762541806 0.125424944231 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0585284280936 0.0416121511921 141% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59669465677 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0284280936455 0.026700313972 106% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0936454849498 0.113004496875 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0351170568562 0.0255425247493 137% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0200668896321 0.0127820249294 157% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3265.0 2731.13054187 120% => OK
No of words: 550.0 446.07635468 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93636363636 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.57801047555 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.330909090909 0.378187486979 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.261818181818 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.176363636364 0.208842608468 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0927272727273 0.135150697306 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59669465677 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 207.018472906 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.378181818182 0.469332199767 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.025610225 52.1807786196 84% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.039408867 120% => OK
Sentence length: 22.9166666667 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5648728116 57.7814097925 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.041666667 141.986410481 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9166666667 23.2022227129 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.724660767414 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 5.14285714286 175% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 49.0984848485 51.9672348444 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.72222222222 1.8405768891 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319414207394 0.441005458295 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.163613074315 0.135418324435 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0907561445531 0.0829849096947 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.672358368699 0.58762219726 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154395055532 0.147661913831 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132795067779 0.193483328276 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553582120034 0.0970749176394 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.292061992378 0.42659136922 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.124595146558 0.0774707102158 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180125483844 0.312017818177 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491678662707 0.0698173142475 70% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 6.46551724138 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 14.657635468 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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