In the above statement, the author asserts that workers of Leeville less suffer from stress-related illness and have less sick days of their workplace than workers of Masonton because of their relaxed pace of life. While supporting the argument, however, the author makes several assumptions which cannot be taken for granted thus the argument remains largely unconvincing without considering further evidence to verify the author’s claim.
Firstly, the claim hinges on the assumption that less sick days of Leeville has causal relation with relaxed pace of life, however, this may not be the case. Because there are other contributing factors to influence lower sick days of workers. For example, if companies of Leeville have more rigid and tight policy allowing their workers to get a sick day, then it may cause lower the number of permission of sick days than Masonton. It is also possible that the amount and degree of work in companies of Leevilles is more demanding thus it makes their workers be reluctant to take a rest at their home even if they are sick. Therefore, the author has to consider if there are any other alternatives to provide explanation for the situation rather than relaxed pace of life.
Secondly, the author assumes that the number of diagnosis of stress-illness reflect the actual number of people who suffered from psychological problems. However, the number of diagnosis may not the same of the actual number of patients. If most residents of Leeville’s do not afford the expense to go to the doctor or if there are not enough medical infrastructures in Leeville, the number of diagnosis of stress-illness may not reflect the number of patients in Leeville. The city of Masonton, however, the plentiful number of doctors and citizens who are affordable to go to the hospitals may cause to increase the number of patients who got diagnosis of stress-related illness.
Lastly, even if residents of Leeville are far from stress-related illness, the author assumes that relaxed pace of life is the only factor deciding less outbreak of stress-related disease, however, there might be other contributing factors. Since the town of Leeville is small, it might be possible that residents of the town has more intimate relationship with neighborhood than large city of Masonton and it may allow residents of Leeville to have healthy mental state. Counsel programs which aims to control one’s mind by town might influence to reduce the number of patients of psychological problems. Thus, the author needs to provide information pertaining to characteristics of town of Leeville to justify the conclusion.
In sum, the argument is not well supported and based on incomplete assumptions. Several alternative explanations can be brought forth which could substantially undermine the plausibility of the author’s claim thereby calls for the need for further evidence.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2381 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.12 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.887 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.95 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.374 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ife, however, this may not be the case. Because there are other contributing factors to...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 604, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: increasing
...rdable to go to the hospitals may cause to increase the number of patients who got diagnosi...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...alls for the need for further evidence.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 465.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24086021505 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96416802103 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451612903226 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 758.7 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0514537728 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.352941176 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3529411765 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 5.70786347227 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304835142171 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990615159302 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859413815698 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162301793312 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939445836696 0.0628817314937 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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