Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. According to the Leeville Chamber of Commerce, these facts can be attributed to the health benefits of the relatively relaxed pace of life in Leeville.
The author of this argument is observing the number of Leeville residents who suffer from stress-related health issues, compared to the number of residents of a nearby large city called Masonton, who have the same problem. The author is citing the facts that Leeville residents take fewer sick days off and the number of workers with stress-related illness diagnosis is much lower. His conclusion is that stated differences are due to relaxed pace of life in Leeville. While living in smaller, relaxed environment certainly has many benefits compared to a life in a face-paced city, this line of reasoning is rife with holes and assumptions, that we will discuss below.
To begin with, the author does not offer an insight in the exact number of sick days that Leeville and Masonton residents take. The term fewer is vague and can mean just two or three days less. If Leeville workers would take just two days fewer than workers from the nearby town, this data would not be significant enough to draw a conclusion. Also, the author does not mention any time frame. Is he talking about number of absences per week, month or year? If a small number of Leeville workers were absent from their jobs due to stress in the last week, that does not mean that in the upcoming week their number will not be bigger than the number of stressed out and absent Masonton workers.
Furthermore, we do not know why exactly the number of stress-related illness diagnosis is smaller in Leeville than in Masonton. The line of thought does not offer any explanations. Maybe Masonton residents do not like to visit hospitals so much, or maybe Masonton doctors are not skilled enough to recogniye symptoms of stress-related illnesses and diagnoye them. If some of these explanations would hold true, the argument could easily fall apart.
Lastly, apropos the stated positive relation between health and the relatively relaxed pace of life in Leeville, it is clearly based on an assumption that Leeville residents are healthier than Masonton residents. However, the author is only offering facts about stress-related issues, without mentioning any other health problems. If the number of Leeville workers who suffer from arthritis and pneumonia would be much higher than the number of Masonton workers with same issues, than it would be wrong to conclude that life in Leeville has health benefits. If the conclusion is wrong, the argument is breaking apart.
Considering above stated, the author needs to strengthen his argument with more evidence for health benefits of living in Leeville.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...of absences per week, month or year? If a small number of Leeville workers were absent from their...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'talking about', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260215053763 0.25644967241 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.144086021505 0.15541462614 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.105376344086 0.0836205057962 126% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0645161290323 0.0520304965353 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0215053763441 0.0272364105082 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.141935483871 0.125424944231 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0301075268817 0.0416121511921 72% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.64348120906 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0215053763441 0.026700313972 81% => OK
Particles: 0.00215053763441 0.001811407834 119% => OK
Determiners: 0.0903225806452 0.113004496875 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0193548387097 0.0255425247493 76% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0150537634409 0.0127820249294 118% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2577.0 2731.13054187 94% => OK
No of words: 426.0 446.07635468 95% => OK
Chars per words: 6.04929577465 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.37323943662 0.378187486979 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.265258215962 0.287650121315 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.197183098592 0.208842608468 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.107981220657 0.135150697306 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64348120906 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 207.018472906 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457746478873 0.469332199767 98% => OK
Word variations: 49.8745737432 52.1807786196 96% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 22.4210526316 23.2022227129 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6275540502 57.7814097925 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.631578947 141.986410481 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4210526316 23.2022227129 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.578947368421 0.724660767414 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 48.9468742278 51.9672348444 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.8785046729 1.8405768891 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.557072280804 0.441005458295 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114995509218 0.135418324435 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.079897639921 0.0829849096947 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.543978141832 0.58762219726 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.176177465816 0.147661913831 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.219426220124 0.193483328276 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117530129643 0.0970749176394 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.365408966084 0.42659136922 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0809710740809 0.0774707102158 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.37641013057 0.312017818177 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0902330327053 0.0698173142475 129% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.87684729064 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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