The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a national newspaper.
"Your recent article on corporate downsizing* in the United States is misleading. The article gives the mistaken impression that many competent workers who lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship, often for years, before finding other suitable employment. But this impression is contradicted by a recent report on the United States economy, which found that since 1992 far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated. The report also demonstrates that many of those who lost their jobs have found new employment. Two-thirds of the newly created jobs have been in industries that tend to pay above-average wages, and the vast majority of these jobs are full-time."
*Downsizing is the process in which corporations deliberately reduce the number of their employees.
the author writes a letter to editor of a national newspaper, about the article . according to article workers in elthyria has to face serious economic hardships due to downsizing . the author claims about the economy of elthyria ,first claim is that since 1999 far more jobs have been created ,second claim is newly created jobs industries tend to pay above average wages . but these claims are not convincing more evidences are need to prof this claim like, which type of jobs are provide, the qualification work skill they need .etc.
firstly , according to author in 1999 more jobs are created .may be this true, but their is no evidence that how much time before the jobs are provided may be the jobs are provided long ago and now there are no jobs . depend on past job opportunities we can't predict that there are enough jobs present in the market.
secondly , new industries are opened in elthyria . but may be industry demands different skills . people of elthyria have no suitable skill for that jobs . may be to get the job worker have to qualify the exam or to take training or they have to pay fee for it .may be the people are not educated in elthyria so they can't work like engineer or a management employee .
moreover, it may be true that industries tend to pay above average wages ,but they demand another requirements like worker have to live there , or work long hours etc. this is not possible for everyone specially one who has family or who is in older age to work long hours. moreover the type of work is not defined ,may be it demands more physical work so ,industries tends to pay more wages.
in sum , the arguments need more evidence to prove the statement about the economy condition in elthriya . author should provide currently information about the jobs ,statics of jobs which shows the jobs opportunity in elthriya ,or which type of work is provided to workers.
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Don't put a space before the punctuation marks but put a space after the punctuation marks. why, with wrong punctuation marks, they will mislead the E-rater.
'like engineer or a management employee .' should be 'like engineer or a management employee.'.
'...tend to pay above average wages ,but they demand...' should be ' ...tend to pay above average wages, but they demand'
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