The following appeared in the summary of a study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia.
"Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, for the past several decades, food-processing companies have also been adding salicylates to foods as preservatives. This rise in the commercial use of salicylates has been found to correlate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in our twenty-year study. Recently, food-processing companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. With this new use for salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen of Mentia."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author argues that with the new use of salicylates as flavor additives, we can expect a continued steady decline in the number of headaches suffered by the average citizen if Mentia. To bolster his argument the author states that many food companies use salicylates as food preservatives also and this use of salicylates has been found to corelate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in study. Moreover, he adds that the food companies have found that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods. The author's argument is not cogent since it ignores certain crucial assumptions.
Firstly, the author assumes that salicylates is also effective in headaches only because it belongs to the same chemical family as aspirin.But it is not clear that the presence of salicylates in food products is the cause of the decrease in the number of average headacehes.
Secondly, the author co-relating the presence of salicylates and the decrease in average number of headaches reported is also dubious, as we do not have any information about that the people are sincerely reporting for their headaches or not? Which can make the results of the study suspect.
Lastly, the use of salicylates as a flavor in food products can help to decrease the number of headaches in Mentia is not necessary. Because , maybe the people of the city Mentia will not like the flavor of salicylates in food products and avoid using them.
To sum up, the author argument that the new use of salicylates as flavor additives will decrease the number of headaches reported is not completely sound. To better examine the argument the author must have provided with the better study about the co-relation of saliclyates and aspirin, information about the study etc
Sentence: To bolster his argument the author states that many food companies use salicylates as food preservatives also and this use of salicylates has been found to corelate with a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by participants in study.
Error: corelate Suggestion: correlate
Sentence: Firstly, the author assumes that salicylates is also effective in headaches only because it belongs to the same chemical family as aspirin.But it is not clear that the presence of salicylates in food products is the cause of the decrease in the number of average headacehes.
Error: headacehes Suggestion: headaches
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