"People should not be misled by the advertising competition between Coldex and Cold-Away, both popular over-the-counter cold medications that anyone can purchase without a doctor's prescription. Each brand is accusing the other of causing some well-known, unwanted side effect: Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known to cause drowsiness. But the choice should be clear for most health-conscious people: Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is Coldex.Clearly, Cold-Away is more effective."
The above argument about the competition between the two medications, Coldex and Cold-Away is flawed in many dimensions .The information is not complete and there is no support provided by the author for the analysis.
Firstly, there is no data provided by the author of the amount people being misled due to the advertisements of the medications. Also if both medications are popular, then why is there a need of advertisement?
Secondly, as it is said that people take the medication without prescription then it may happen that the there may be a overdose or underdose of the medication leading to side effects. In the passage it is mentioned that there are unwanted side effect's.But there is no specific information given about the side effects,thus providing insufficient data.
Thirdly, each brand is acusing the other of causing side effects like high blood pressure and drwosiness. But no statistical analysis is given that what type of dose can cause side effects. Also if there are side effects found it s not mentioned that whether these side effects are seen in youngsters, old people or small-childrens.
Furthermore,the part that feebles the argument is that inspite of the advertisements, if people are health conscious then no one would take the medication without doctor's prescription. Cold- Away is said to have been much longer in the market and used by hospitals, the reason might be its cost , it's availability . This data is not provided by the author. So we cannot comment on the effectiveness of the medication with improper data.
To sum up, the above argument lacks data, provides no support to its claim. Thus the argument is completely flawed.
Sentence: Secondly, as it is said that people take the medication without prescription then it may happen that the there may be a overdose or underdose of the medication leading to side effects.
Description: The fragment the there may is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace there with adjective
Sentence: Cold- Away is said to have been much longer in the market and used by hospitals, the reason might be its cost , it's availability .
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to it's and availability
Sentence: Thirdly, each brand is acusing the other of causing side effects like high blood pressure and drwosiness.
Error: drwosiness Suggestion: drowsiness
Error: acusing Suggestion: accusing
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