In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The role of history in a civilised society is to enable reflection and influence a better future. Likewise, in any sphere, this holds true. Various achievers in numerous fields talk about being influenced and inspired by notable achievers or achievements in that field. It could be philosophy, technology or even politics, but reflection upon past successes facilitates one to thrust forward.
Carl Pei, a 26 year old Chinese man, notices, that all round him, all his friends, were using Apple products, specifically the iPhone. Not entirely for its functionality, but for its aesthetic value and brand image. Frustrated by not finding the same in any Android phone, he ventures to build a phone, which went onto gain cult-like fandom, rivalling that of Apples fanboys. He called his company OnePlus, and openly spoke about how Apple's and Steve Jobs achievements in creating strong branding techniques and design ideas influenced him.
Another example, is the Greek philosopher, Plato, whose Platonic theories and ideologies are pervasive throught many philosophy teexxtbooks. He claimed that all that he knew came from his teacher Socrates, and was so highly influenced by him that most of the time he would be quoting Socrates verbatim.
Along the same lines, another person known to quote verbatim, is current Indian Prime Minister, Narendra Modi. He came from very humble backgrounds, from being a tea seller, to being the head of state to the most populous democracy of the world. He was deeply inspired by former political figures, like Mahatma Gandhi and Martin Luther King, and was influenced by their achievements. He believed that with struggle and perseverance anything could be achieved.
However, one could possibly refute this concept, because, many great achievements made in several fields happened solely because the people who pioneered them, were inspired or influenced by nothing of the sort, and that is precisely how they brought ground-breaking innovation to that field. Steve Jobs being an apt example of the same. He dared to think that phone didn't need to have keys and went onto give us the smart phones we hold in our hands today.
Finally, the take away is that achievements take place, because somebody dreams them, and dreams are an image of what goes in our minds. Likewise, one person's achievements could be attributed to reflection on similar past achievements.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'likewise', 'so']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.259090909091 0.240241500013 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.156818181818 0.157235817809 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0727272727273 0.0880659088768 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0454545454545 0.0497285424764 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0590909090909 0.0444667217837 133% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.109090909091 0.12292977631 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0522727272727 0.0406280797675 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76751486001 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0227272727273 0.030933414821 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0727272727273 0.0997080785238 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0113636363636 0.0249443105267 46% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0136363636364 0.0148568991511 92% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2411.0 2732.02544248 88% => OK
No of words: 386.0 452.878318584 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.24611398964 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.386010362694 0.366273622748 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.290155440415 0.280924506359 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.217616580311 0.200843997647 108% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.137305699482 0.132149295362 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76751486001 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 219.290929204 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619170984456 0.48968727796 126% => OK
Word variations: 76.9360303697 55.4138127331 139% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6194690265 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.3157894737 23.380412469 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5401838037 59.4972553346 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.894736842 141.124799967 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 23.380412469 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.315789473684 0.674092028746 47% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 49.3313335151 51.4728631049 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.60869565217 1.64882698954 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326204534366 0.391690518653 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0447177317019 0.123202303941 36% => Sentence sentence coherence is low.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0247316163472 0.077325440228 32% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.490357485935 0.547984918172 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136561808179 0.149214159877 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109336866892 0.161403998019 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616856554907 0.0892212321368 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.259117770835 0.385218514788 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0533711444169 0.0692045440612 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192898332778 0.275328986314 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651614453521 0.0653680567796 100% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.70907079646 148% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.5995575221 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.