The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
We all admire our leaders who inspire us to change our lives, reach our goals, and they build a solid bond within the society as a whole. As said, children and youngsters are the future of our country and these are the people who have the power to bring the positive or negative changes in the society depending on the way how they view the concept of leadership. Thus, it is crucial to teach them the value of cooperation rather than forcing them into a competition to succeed in life. This can have a great impact on government, industry and other fields, which will have leaders who will know the power of working together to achieve a common goal.
Firstly, a great leader is one who knows the value of sharing and working together. These leaders understand the problems in the society that are affecting a large masses and they are willing to work with the people to know their issues in a better way. A great example is Mahatma Gandhi , who is regarded as one of the most influential leaders in the history of mankind. People see him as a epitome of non-violence. He knew that people of India wants independence from British rule, however ,according to him, the way of violence they choose was not the correct way to achieve independence. Instead he taught people how to influence our enemy , not by violence, but through the power of non-violence. This indeed helped India to regain its independence in 1948 and this proved how a leader who knows how to make people work together can change a major situation in the society.
Secondly, education system plays a vital role to develop great leaders of the future. It is commonly observed that, in current education system across the globe, students are constantly competing with each other to climb the ladder of success. However, they forget the most valuable characteristic that they need to learn is cooperation. If the education system is designed in such a way that students are required to complete their studies by working on group projects where they will have to interact with other team mates and also with the people, this can really help to understand them how important it is to work together and help each other for the betterment of the society.
In sum, a leader has variable characteristics of which cooperation is one. Even though we are living in the world where we have to compete for everything we want, learning to share and cooperate and also teaching the same to our children is crucial to develop great leaders of tomorrow.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 438.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73287671233 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59680250779 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481735159817 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.1468023615 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.941176471 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139448537369 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421912720546 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033404108678 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0801796823098 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0262567994893 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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