The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government , industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
This topic raises controversial issue of whether the society should instill a sense of cooperation in the youth or they should not. Indisputably, cooperation is a characteristic that is required for ethical work. Nevertheless, competition is a key to succeed in the current world. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that to prepare the young people for leadership in government, industry and other fields, a sense of cooperation is mandatory.
In the current world scenario as there is a rat race taking place to be on the top, competition is vital. To illustrate my opinion I would like to give the examples of Steve Jobs and Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg.
Steve Jobs who died in 2013 was the co- founder of Apple products. He loved what he did. He got back Apple from bankruptcy. His motto in life was to be your best in your niche. He considered competition to be very important. Even though Samsung Company tried to be a rival of Apple but still even today Apple is considered to be superior of the two.
Bill Gates was the cofounder of Microsoft. He is a very competitive person . His drive to win led him to become one of the richest persons in the world. According to him, perseverance was the key to never let competition pressurize the better of him.
Mark Zuckerberg is the founder of the extremely famous social networking site Facebook. In 2003 , facebook was faced by competition from other networking sites such as Myspace and Orkut. But he never gave up. Facebook is still considered the best social networking site while the other two have faded away in popularity over the time. Furthermore, he was even quoted saying that one should be at the top of their industry.
In conclusion, although cooperation is important to a have better well being in life, competition is the ultimate key to success.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243553008596 0.240241500013 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.163323782235 0.157235817809 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.080229226361 0.0880659088768 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0487106017192 0.0497285424764 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.054441260745 0.0444667217837 122% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117478510029 0.12292977631 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0343839541547 0.0406280797675 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8874038486 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0429799426934 0.030933414821 139% => OK
Particles: 0.00573065902579 0.0016655270985 344% => OK
Determiners: 0.0888252148997 0.0997080785238 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0114613180516 0.0249443105267 46% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00859598853868 0.0148568991511 58% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1840.0 2732.02544248 67% => OK
No of words: 318.0 452.878318584 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78616352201 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.58838876751 92% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.292452830189 0.366273622748 80% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.22641509434 0.280924506359 81% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.169811320755 0.200843997647 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.135220125786 0.132149295362 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8874038486 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 219.290929204 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540880503145 0.48968727796 110% => OK
Word variations: 56.8570455692 55.4138127331 103% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.4545454545 23.380412469 62% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7445614555 59.4972553346 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6363636364 141.124799967 59% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4545454545 23.380412469 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.674092028746 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 37.0960548885 51.4728631049 72% => OK
Elegance: 1.48387096774 1.64882698954 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431263876923 0.391690518653 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.083531504276 0.123202303941 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0825314388748 0.077325440228 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.513663774774 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.199022700016 0.149214159877 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13410455437 0.161403998019 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105760747401 0.0892212321368 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.277413853447 0.385218514788 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0603392267799 0.0692045440612 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250721335713 0.275328986314 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126737520863 0.0653680567796 194% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.5995575221 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.