Best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
I disagree that best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. In fast pace world like today, competition is required but what about cooperation? It is an important factor too. It teaches us empathy, sharing and so many good qualities. It is with the combination of both you can achieve success in any field.
Cooperation is required because it makes us good human. Consider an example where a student is not performing well and he has to perform since there is a lot of competition in the class. Now, it is possible that he is not getting what is being taught and end up failing because no student helped him, because there was such a competition in class. This scenario would change if there was a sense of cooperation among students. If someone is not performing well, then child will ask his fellow students and they will make him understand the concepts etc. And thus, he will be able to clear the exam. This created empathy among students. Also teaches good values, that someone helped me and I too shall help someone in need.
Consider another example, through competition you have become CEO of a company, but no have no understanding of cooperation, What now? What would happen? What can you do with the competition spirit now? You sure need cooperation at this point; to understand your team members, make sure they are happy, listen to them and to resolve there problems. So, it is up to a point that competition spirit would help you. After that it cooperation spirit is required.
Hence you need to have both competition and cooperation spirit. And competition spirit should not come into the way of cooperation spirit. If there is needs to be a competition spirit, make sure your competition is with yourself. You have to improve from yesterday self. If you have both cooperation and competition spirit only then you can prosper in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...m. This created empathy among students. Also teaches good values, that someone helpe...
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...that competition spirit would help you. After that it cooperation spirit is required....
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...t cooperation spirit is required. Hence you need to have both competition and c...
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Message: Did you mean 'there are needs'?
Suggestion: there are needs
... into the way of cooperation spirit. If there is needs to be a competition spirit, make sure y...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'well', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.212987012987 0.240241500013 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.184415584416 0.157235817809 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0467532467532 0.0880659088768 53% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0545454545455 0.0497285424764 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0909090909091 0.0444667217837 204% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.109090909091 0.12292977631 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0337662337662 0.0406280797675 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76320864525 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.025974025974 0.030933414821 84% => OK
Particles: 0.0025974025974 0.0016655270985 156% => OK
Determiners: 0.0727272727273 0.0997080785238 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0285714285714 0.0249443105267 115% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0181818181818 0.0148568991511 122% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1994.0 2732.02544248 73% => OK
No of words: 343.0 452.878318584 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81341107872 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.58838876751 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.31195335277 0.366273622748 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.244897959184 0.280924506359 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.154518950437 0.200843997647 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116618075802 0.132149295362 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76320864525 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 219.290929204 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507288629738 0.48968727796 104% => OK
Word variations: 53.0795244114 55.4138127331 96% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 14.2916666667 23.380412469 61% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6013944413 59.4972553346 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0833333333 141.124799967 59% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2916666667 23.380412469 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.416666666667 0.674092028746 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 38.781462585 51.4728631049 75% => OK
Elegance: 1.07874015748 1.64882698954 65% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373049220319 0.391690518653 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114441686308 0.123202303941 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0903475195821 0.077325440228 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.433293502938 0.547984918172 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.144105942184 0.149214159877 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110186012971 0.161403998019 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.179476066832 0.0892212321368 201% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.364460128532 0.385218514788 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0959486144988 0.0692045440612 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264518352703 0.275328986314 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.192762848183 0.0653680567796 295% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.