"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Good leadership qualities should be ingrained in people from the young to better prepare them for their future positions in government, industries and other fields. Good leadership qualities include ability of making decisions for the team, the self-confidence, and the desire to excel and push the team for success. But a good leader unwilling to cooperate can be harmful for the team as whole. So the question of cooperation vs competition as a quality to be instilled in young is not so straightforward.
Inclination for competition makes people to constantly improve themselves and try to overtake others who are much better than them. People with strong sense of competition always try to conquer their own flaws rather than ignoring them. Just like how it is seen in sports, a new high-score always results in competitors working harder to compete. This push for excellence is necessary in a good leader, lest the leader go easy on the targets their team is trying to achieve.
Not everyone can be a good leader; humans vary considerably in their traits. If a person with predisposition for leadership, is forced to cooperate, it would hamper their self inclination of commanding and making decision for a group. Competitive feeling, however, promotes such people, and the ultimatly results in ensurement of the best leaders to occupy the top positions.
Leaders have to be among the best in their fields. If not, the achievements of other people can undermine their authority. People who are raised to be more cooperative than competitive are more likely to prioritize their own success less than others', in which case a person with more competitive disposition would take their advantage and instead snatch the leadership position. Thus, a leader with more cooperative feeling, is not in a stable position.
No great thing has ever been build without contribution of myriad of people. Even Einstein would not have succeed in formulating his theory of general relativity, if it were not for the countless scientists who build the basic theories of physics needed before the Einstein's theory could emerge. Thus, one could say that cooperation is always a better trait to have. But this conclusion assumes that there could not be cooperation existing together with competition. It could be said without any doubt that all those individual scientists had been competiting among each other, which was the ultimate reason for the progress of science.
Cooperation and competition both are necessary traits in a good human being. I would choose both of them with equal degree for myself. But if I were to choose between cooperation and competition, I would choose competition, because it gives direction to my life. Similarly, young should be instilled with a sense of competition more than the sense of cooperation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rgets their team is trying to achieve. Not everyone can be a good leader; human...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'succeeded'.
Suggestion: succeeded
...of people. Even Einstein would not have succeed in formulating his theory of general re...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234126984127 0.240241500013 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.15873015873 0.157235817809 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0873015873016 0.0880659088768 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0555555555556 0.0497285424764 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.047619047619 0.0444667217837 107% => OK
Prepositions: 0.138888888889 0.12292977631 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0396825396825 0.0406280797675 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.94444424294 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0337301587302 0.030933414821 109% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0853174603175 0.0997080785238 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0277777777778 0.0249443105267 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0119047619048 0.0148568991511 80% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2832.0 2732.02544248 104% => OK
No of words: 459.0 452.878318584 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16993464052 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.381263616558 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272331154684 0.280924506359 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19825708061 0.200843997647 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.156862745098 0.132149295362 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94444424294 2.79330140395 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 219.290929204 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501089324619 0.48968727796 102% => OK
Word variations: 57.3758775641 55.4138127331 104% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.125 23.380412469 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8104567056 59.4972553346 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 141.124799967 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 23.380412469 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.291666666667 0.674092028746 43% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 46.3581154684 51.4728631049 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.57575757576 1.64882698954 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399962549476 0.391690518653 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.129762969047 0.123202303941 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0864821538233 0.077325440228 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.501371377018 0.547984918172 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118131411129 0.149214159877 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142185874055 0.161403998019 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614375500516 0.0892212321368 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.29939774575 0.385218514788 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0714366866457 0.0692045440612 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251990646766 0.275328986314 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490267241852 0.0653680567796 75% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.