The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It is certainly true that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership roles in diverse fields is through the promotion of cooperation. The idea of a democracy, is based on a governmental body whose primary role is to serve the people. On the other hand, given the fact that society is driven by a capitalist economy, many might argue that achieving high ranking position can only be accomplished through the protestant work ethic and the spirit of competition. However, even these forms of individual economic competition ultimately rely upon a high level of connectivity with the people upon whom they depend. Therefore, merely promoting competition—a Darwinian framework of survival of the fittest—will ultimately produce a society of individualistic members who are motivated primarily by their own self interest; insular and pragmatic, without the instilling of cooperation, the spirit of democracy would be lost.
One need look no further than the current presidential elections to see how competition has sullied the spirit of cooperation: in fact, the race between democratic candidate Hillary Clinton and republican candidate Donald Trump has become—as framed within popular media—no more than a smear campaign, a competition for the cooperation of the common people. Scandals over the believability and truthfulness of each candidate have dominated their campaigns. Indeed, competition has arisen around the very idea of cooperation, obscuring the larger issues. For instance, America, as the world’s greatest economic and military power, has grave responsibility upon the global stage to promote international cooperation between nations. Bill Clinton fostered this spirit of cooperation by attempting to unite the Israeli state. Not only America, but also in Korea, President Kim Dae Jung was lauded for his efforts to reunite North and South Korea, enacting policies of economic cooperation and collaborative projects. Its easy to forget the importance of cooperation to the role of a nation’s primary leader when news reports reveal new scandals each day in the competitive race for presidency. However, once the campaign trail comes to an end, it is not the competition to become president that is remembered, but a president’s actions to unite or polarize their nations from global alliances and international obligations. And even more importantly, how well they cooperated with the demands and desires of their people. Not only is cooperation important in the realm of global politics, but also within the competitive capitalist economic sphere as well.
Today, the business world is dominated by a few large tech-giants. However, just as much as the spirit of competition was present from the inception all the way to their rise to prominence, companies like Facebook, Google, and Amazon, have secured their position as technological goliaths through the spirit of cooperation. These technology companies have found success not through blind competition for the most cutting-edge devices and services, but by their connectivity to the very people they serve. Indeed, their very competition is based upon who can meet the demands of the people: who can offer the most convenience to our daily lives through technological innovations such as increased cloud storage, accessibility to information, and convenience of use. These advancements in themselves, in order to be competitive, require a great deal of cooperation between departments—from the code-writers to public relations, a certain synergy is necessary for these tech-giants to even compete.
Even in professional sports—a field that depends on the very idea of competition—before a team can win, it is commonly believed that they must also unite as a cohesive unit. It is not uncommon to hear NBA champions reminisce on a winning season with mantras that embody the spirit of cooperation like, “all for one”, or “togetherness”. Indeed, within any societal body, from the macro-level of national political leadership down to a micro-level of group athletics, competition itself depends upon the spirit of cooperation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...iety is driven by a capitalist economy, many might argue that achieving high ranking posit...
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Suggestion:
...all the way to their rise to prominence, companies like Facebook, Google, and Ama...
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Suggestion:
...depends upon the spirit of cooperation.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'look', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'such as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.269601100413 0.240241500013 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.111416781293 0.157235817809 71% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0976616231087 0.0880659088768 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.060522696011 0.0497285424764 122% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0302613480055 0.0444667217837 68% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130674002751 0.12292977631 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0330123796424 0.0406280797675 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.37568766279 2.79330140395 121% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0288858321871 0.030933414821 93% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.101788170564 0.0997080785238 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00962861072902 0.0249443105267 39% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0151306740028 0.0148568991511 102% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4190.0 2732.02544248 153% => OK
No of words: 636.0 452.878318584 140% => OK
Chars per words: 6.58805031447 6.0361032391 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02185627292 4.58838876751 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.413522012579 0.366273622748 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.34748427673 0.280924506359 124% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.254716981132 0.200843997647 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.202830188679 0.132149295362 153% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37568766279 2.79330140395 121% => OK
Unique words: 329.0 219.290929204 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517295597484 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 66.393343432 55.4138127331 120% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6194690265 112% => OK
Sentence length: 27.652173913 23.380412469 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.6036447085 59.4972553346 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 182.173913043 141.124799967 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.652173913 23.380412469 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.521739130435 0.674092028746 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 62.400601586 51.4728631049 121% => OK
Elegance: 2.14285714286 1.64882698954 130% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391602631379 0.391690518653 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0887986458688 0.123202303941 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0429148785968 0.077325440228 55% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.533376753398 0.547984918172 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.10885099212 0.149214159877 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160351913717 0.161403998019 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759614448794 0.0892212321368 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.48968420565 0.385218514788 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.102925713824 0.0692045440612 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291377792506 0.275328986314 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465329232065 0.0653680567796 71% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88274336283 123% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Minimum three arguments wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.