The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The issue here of whether the society should instill cooperation instead of competition to prepare its young people foe leadership is rather a contentious one. While competition is neccecary to bring out the leadership in someone, cooperative quality is needed as much. I agree with author that society needs to instill cooperation and not competition to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other field.
Firstly, competition is already a inherent part of one's life. One does competion with one thing or the other every moment in the life. If not someone else, one competes with oneself in day to day life.We compete to do better than what is previously done by someone else or even by us. We wake up every morning and try to beat us and do better in every aspect of life. So it is not for society to instill competition in young people. Rather they can instill cooperation in them and bring a leader out of them. Leader is suppose to represent the ones under him. To represent them and do good for them, cooperation is must. Without cooperation, leaders can neither represent nor do justice to the people he represents. So instead of instilling competition in young people, society should instill cooperation in them.
Looking backing in history, we can see some great leaders. Studying them lets us see that taking competition too far did not work good for them too. One obviuous example that comes to mind is Adolf Hitler. He took competition too far and his competition to the world that his race was the best is remembered for bad reasons. If not for too extreme leadership, we can see George Washington. He had a competitive mindset but also he used cooperation in a constructive way. He chose his council with the people that disagreed with him. He considered the oppositions' points and cooperated with them to make better decisions. One can see Mahatma Gandhi base his entire freedom journey for our country on coperation. Unity and cooperation amongst citizens of India according to him were the biggest weapon we could use against the Britishers, and it worked well.
Finally, we can see that even though competition is important for leadership to strive but cooperation is needed as much or even more for leadership to be successful, be it in government or in industries ot anywhere. So society should focus on instilling cooperation in young people not competition.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'while']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.217488789238 0.240241500013 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.170403587444 0.157235817809 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0717488789238 0.0880659088768 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0695067264574 0.0497285424764 140% => OK
Pronouns: 0.085201793722 0.0444667217837 192% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.12331838565 0.12292977631 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0269058295964 0.0406280797675 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84582083164 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0381165919283 0.030933414821 123% => OK
Particles: 0.00448430493274 0.0016655270985 269% => OK
Determiners: 0.0515695067265 0.0997080785238 52% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.02466367713 0.0249443105267 99% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00896860986547 0.0148568991511 60% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2415.0 2732.02544248 88% => OK
No of words: 409.0 452.878318584 90% => OK
Chars per words: 5.90464547677 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.347188264059 0.366273622748 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.273838630807 0.280924506359 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166259168704 0.200843997647 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136919315403 0.132149295362 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84582083164 2.79330140395 102% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 219.290929204 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491442542787 0.48968727796 100% => OK
Word variations: 53.8577930429 55.4138127331 97% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6194690265 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.36 23.380412469 70% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8139975989 59.4972553346 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6 141.124799967 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.36 23.380412469 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.44 0.674092028746 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 43.7438630807 51.4728631049 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.13103448276 1.64882698954 69% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.5612057723 0.391690518653 143% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0928139173042 0.123202303941 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0620041928384 0.077325440228 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.420438511986 0.547984918172 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.149861211497 0.149214159877 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177707152791 0.161403998019 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121044910201 0.0892212321368 136% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.359565968806 0.385218514788 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0886511066008 0.0692045440612 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.409242068363 0.275328986314 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100894518381 0.0653680567796 154% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88274336283 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.70907079646 295% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.5995575221 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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