Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.Write a response in which you discuss the ext

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Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.

Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

The claim and reason put forward by the author, in my view is generalised. I completely agree with the claim and the reason, but to certain extent. Any field, may it be business, politics, education, government can only flourish under a good leadership. A good leader is once who can transform any field into a supermacy which carriers can dominate the whole field, at the sametime a bad leader can devolve it into nothing but a mess. It is often debated about the maximum of tenure of thoes in power, which obviously should end after a certain period of time, but can be equally catastrophic, if it is handed over to a new individual, who is not a good leader.
A leader, for example a President of country, who is good communicator, has transformed the country from a developing nation into a superpower, had brought the country to stage at which it dominates the whole world, is a good decision maker and is liked by his country men. If he his forced to step down after serving a fixed tenure of five years would be unfair. It is not guranted that the new president elect will take the nation, again to same level of prosperity as it was by previous president, because the leaders like these are born on in generation. In the present stiuation, instead of revitalizing it would prove to be a disaster.
At the same time, keeping a prolonged tenure can also prove to be insidious in many ways. The current generation is constantly changing, so are their views and belief systems, also, the expectation of people has increased considerably. In this situation having a leader, who has a same old prespective and reservations with not prove to be fruitful in any field.
In conclusion, in any field thoes who are in power shoudl step down, but not just after fixed years, but when time has changed.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 169, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to certain extent. Any field, may it be business, politics, education, governmen...
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Line 1, column 547, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ch obviously should end after a certain period of time, but can be equally catastrophic, if it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 320.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64375 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75236936282 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1352172884 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.307692308 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76923076923 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21256326476 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775719055504 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694389792841 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132866883696 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761476578477 0.0667264976115 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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