“Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.”
Nowadays the importance of management and leadership in the success of any field are not hidden for anybody. The writer of the issue contends that individuals who are in power in any field should leave their position after five years. The writer further reasons that new leadership can guarantee the success of any enterprise. In what follows I will first discuss my response to the claim and then explain what I think of the reason on which the claim is based.
The claim suggests that the resignation of people who are in power in any field is necessary after five years. Although the new leadership can result in new merits – such as new ideas, better situations, the increase of motivation, and refreshed energy – this change cannot be practical for any field. Thus, I do not agree with this claim in all situations for some reason. One of these reasons is that sometimes changing the leader of a company not only can ruin good opportunities in that field, but also can lead to unrecoverable damages because of the lack of experience. Experience a “golden key” to success is the missing link in such companies with a new manager. Hence, is it logical to let the elimination of experiences that have gained over the years and not use them? Undoubtedly, an experienced leader is appreciable and he or she should not be step down immediately after five years. Another reason for my disagreement with the above claim is related to the time of resignation of a leader. Changing the principal, management, or leadership depends on many things, for example, the situation of a company, financial issues, and projects that are ongoing; therefore, this time depend on many things can be changed. Accordingly, despite the fact that new leadership can bring about of prospering in a field, the role of an experienced leader and the appropriate time for leaving a position should not be ignored.
The reason of the aforementioned claim is that new leadership can guarantee the success and prosperous of any enterprise. As far as I am concerned, however, it cannot be generalized to all enterprise. In addition, apart from leadership, there is a wide spectrum of factors, which can affect success. For instance, consider cooperation among employees in a team. It is like a chain in which everybody should do their responsibility in an accurate manner in order for a team, related to any field, to be successful. If one of them does not pay attention to the purpose of their team, this chain cuts and success cannot achieve even with a new leadership. As a result, considering only the one factor--that is new leadership--never can be a guarantee for success.
In conclusion, I should say that achieving success in any field and for any enterprise just by considering different elements and factors which are related to that process is possible. Although among these factors a new leadership is of great importance, success and flourish cannot be confined only to that. Moreover, finding the appropriate time for this change is another important factor which should be considered.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e of the lack of experience. Experience a 'golden key' to success is th...
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Line 5, column 432, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an accurate manner" with adverb for "accurate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...verybody should do their responsibility in an accurate manner in order for a team, related to any fie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, apart from, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2577.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 519.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96531791908 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97647389857 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44894026975 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 808.2 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1296774522 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.375 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.21951772744 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370249418136 0.243740707755 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118296325555 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747317382659 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260944706333 0.150359130593 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646301894285 0.0667264976115 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.