Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Upto last decade, the scenario of career of youths in most of the countries was not in a good condition. They were bombarded by the expectations of their elders and society to choose a career which was considered to be "worthy". In reality, the people who unwillingly choose goals or are forced to choose show signs of failure in the coming future. Nowadays youths often receive advice to follow their own dreams rather than being a sheep who follows the herd.
Things don't happen unless you dream. One should be passionate and focussed in life and should choose his/her own goal in life. The most important goal of one's life should be to do what you love. Even if it's not considered worthy, one must not deter from one's goal. Happiness is the most important achievement in life. If you don't love your goal because someone else has just forced you to do it the results will be disastrous. Consider an example of the legendary cricketer Sachin Tendulkar. Imagine if his parents had asked him to leave cricket and focus on studies. Imagine him being an Engineer. Would he have been successful as he is right now? Absolutely not! He is what he is because he followed his own dreams.
Dreams don't come true unless you do. If one has to be successful in life one has to follow his own dreams. There is no such thing as worthy goals or worthless goals. Modelling or acting might not be a worthy goal for some people in India. Amitabh Bacchan, Rajnikanth, Shahruk khan, etc are Indian bollywood stars. Had they been stopped by their parents to pursue career in acting they wouldn't be successful as they are now. Some Indian Parents have a mentality that girls should choose worthy careers like doctor, engineering or law and Sports and athletics are not meant for women. Mary Kom, P.T Usha, Saina Nehwal and many more are some of the outstanding Indian sports persons who not only followed their goals but also excelled in their careers.
As mentioned earlier, no goal is classified as good or bad, selfish or selfless. If following your goal is making you happy,giving you satisfaction, making you successful then why should we let others interfere and hinder our success and growth. No work is superior or inferior; work to excel;don't run behind success. If you love what you do success will surely follow you. One should keep following their own dreams because one day or the other they come true.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to show'
Suggestion: to show
...ly choose goals or are forced to choose show signs of failure in the coming future. ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...an being a sheep who follows the herd. Things dont happen unless you dream. One...
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Line 2, column 13, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...heep who follows the herd. Things dont happen unless you dream. One should be ...
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Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...oal in life. The most important goal of ones life should be to do what you love. Eve...
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Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...sidered worthy, one must not deter from ones goal. Happiness is the most important a...
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Line 2, column 330, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t important achievement in life. If you dont love your goal because someone else has...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is because he followed his own dreams. Dreams dont come true unless you do. If ...
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Line 3, column 12, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...he followed his own dreams. Dreams dont come true unless you do. If one has to ...
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Line 3, column 41, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... Dreams dont come true unless you do. If one has to be successful in life one ha...
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Line 3, column 389, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...parents to pursue career in acting they wouldnt be successful as they are now. Some Ind...
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Line 3, column 599, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: T
...cs are not meant for women. Mary Kom, P.T Usha, Saina Nehwal and many more are so...
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Line 3, column 638, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
....T Usha, Saina Nehwal and many more are some of the outstanding Indian sports persons who n...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ls but also excelled in their careers. As mentioned earlier, no goal is classif...
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Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , giving
... following your goal is making you happy,giving you satisfaction, making you successful...
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Line 4, column 296, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... is superior or inferior; work to excel;dont run behind success. If you love what yo...
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Line 4, column 321, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... work to excel;dont run behind success. If you love what you do success will surel...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.215644820296 0.240241500013 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.192389006342 0.157235817809 122% => OK
Adjectives: 0.093023255814 0.0880659088768 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0486257928118 0.0497285424764 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0845665961945 0.0444667217837 190% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.093023255814 0.12292977631 76% => OK
Participles: 0.0486257928118 0.0406280797675 120% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.51828750099 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0232558139535 0.030933414821 75% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0528541226216 0.0997080785238 53% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0232558139535 0.0249443105267 93% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0190274841438 0.0148568991511 128% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2415.0 2732.02544248 88% => OK
No of words: 421.0 452.878318584 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.73634204276 6.0361032391 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.346793349169 0.366273622748 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.209026128266 0.280924506359 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.130641330166 0.200843997647 65% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0973871733967 0.132149295362 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51828750099 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 219.290929204 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517814726841 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 58.4491576883 55.4138127331 105% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6194690265 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.5172413793 23.380412469 62% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5838802417 59.4972553346 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.275862069 141.124799967 59% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5172413793 23.380412469 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.206896551724 0.674092028746 31% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.21349557522 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 35.4198542059 51.4728631049 69% => OK
Elegance: 1.0974025974 1.64882698954 67% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296523584887 0.391690518653 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0682148678539 0.123202303941 55% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0821294854628 0.077325440228 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.361955758665 0.547984918172 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138021203958 0.149214159877 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772540471428 0.161403998019 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612712049481 0.0892212321368 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.247631212259 0.385218514788 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0298689452278 0.0692045440612 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190247730618 0.275328986314 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758279472558 0.0653680567796 116% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.30420353982 170% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 7.22455752212 152% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 3.66592920354 191% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.